Pulling the trigger is easy; it’s the backlash that hurts. Ch.2: Time divided
Thursday, June 1, 2006
Here's chapter two in which we get to see what each of the crew is up to. I make it sound so casual especially since a good portion of them have been captured. Please enjoy and feel free to comment.
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The shadows beneath the door stopped moving, the dark light indicating someone’s presence, stood immobile on the other side. River wasn’t rocking back and forth any more her full attention was on the door and what lay behind it. She heard the shuffling of feet and the rummaging through pockets; perhaps someone was looking for a key…
MEANWHILE ON THE OTHER SIDE OF THE DOOR….
“Do not touch that door.” a deep voice bellowed.
“I…I…just wanted to see who was in there. I wanted to look into the eyes of the person who is so important we all had to risk our lives for.”
“You will do no such thing. River Tam is off limits, especially to the likes of space trash like you. You did your part, for that I’m grateful. We wouldn’t have been able to capture the Tams without you and your men or have the extra bonus of having Malcolm Reynolds and his crew under lock and key. Truly I am beyond grateful but if your hand touches that door, I will kill you myself.”
“She must be something special if you’d kill for her. We all know how you hate to get your hands filthy, you hire the big strong men to do all of your dirty work; she must be something special indeed.”
“You’ve been paid, it’d be best now if you took your money and left.”
With that being said, the man who desperately wanted to see River took his leave. The other man, the one obviously in charge, turned to a shorter man at his side and said. “Kill him!”
MEANWHILE BACK ON RIVER’S SIDE OF THE DOOR…
River heard voices, people having a conversation, although she couldn’t make out all the words; just bits and pieces. The minutes passed by and soon the voices began to cease, causing River to let out a breath that she seemed to be holding onto forever. Although River couldn’t exactly hear what was being said the tone of the voices, the deeper one especially, seemed to spell trouble. And River could have sworn to all the stars in the ‘verse she heard the words. ‘Kill ‘em…
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Still..loved this chapter, WishHorse, and can't wait for more:D
BEB
You can't take the sky from me
My only complaint is that the crew seem a bit stupider than what I see in them. Inara's response seemed almost sophmoric, hard to believe from a woman trained for years in letting a person down so that when they left they feel like they won. And Mal not making a connection between getting out and hearing people moving in a duct is almost insulting to the character. Not to mention he doesn't seem like the kind to be dependant on others to get him out of a scratch.
That being said, I love the Wash dialogue. That is so in character that I could imagine Joss writing it. I'm impressed!
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