Serenity: Downtime (New web comic)
POSTED BY: Mutt999
UPDATED: Tuesday, November 16, 2010 16:42
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Yes, we should write to someone, but not about the next Serenity comic. We are completely powerless to hurry the creation process on the next comic unless some Browncoat fan is willing to purchase about ten million copies of The Shepherd's Tale to be given away free by Walmart in China. That would get the attention of Dark Horse. Instead, we should start with a smaller letter writing campaign about Inara's speech balloon.
The published comic is on left. I think Inara is too refined to say, "Aw, man." Steakless Kaylee is dejected. . .
Serenity-Downtime(2010).cbz (3.88 MB) can be downloaded at www.mediafire.com/?tf81p37sys2xu2z 
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Hey good catch!! I too was wondering why Inara would say that, I just kept reading and ignored it. Doesn't really affect much character-wise, but Kaylee definately fits there better. Think I'll take a white out pen to my copy and fix it...There, more better :)
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I got stuck on that too. I decided that it was Kaylee saying it. The bubble is just sorta floating out there. It doesn't even seem like it's attached to Inara or anyone.
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Originally posted by TWO:
Inara's speech balloon.
The published comic is on left. I think Inara is too refined to say, "Aw, man." Steakless Kaylee is dejected. . .
I caught that, too.
I just assumed it was Kaylee, for the same reasons you gave.
Big thanks for the correction.
I screen-capped the comic and will print it out with the other Serenity web comic I saved.
I'll squeeze your corrected panel in there!
Mike
My Firefly Collection:
http://fireflydvd.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=3541
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Quote:For pennausamike I made an alternate version of that page with disappointed Kaylee saying “I was promised steak.” I prefer pie in the sky to steak. www.phrases.org.uk/meanings/282700.html
Originally posted by pennausamike:
I screen-capped the comic and will print it out with the other Serenity web comic I saved.
I'll squeeze your corrected panel in there!
Mike
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The unaltered version of Serenity-Downtime(2010).cbz (3.88 MB) can be downloaded at www.mediafire.com/?tf81p37sys2xu2z
The Joss Whedon script for "Serenity", where Wash lives, is
Serenity-190pages.pdf at www.mediafire.com/two
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Thanks for download, TWO
I’m glad I’m not the only one who thought Zack struggled with capturing Inara’s voice in particular, what little dialog she has, she sounds like a three year old at times and at others, a pendulant teenager. “Me too” “slop” and “Aw man” aren’t phrases she would use. She’s too intelligent, insightful, educated, and articulate to sound like Kaylee’s agreement echo who doesn’t formulate her own opinions.
Maybe next time;)
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Quote:"Me too" could become "I, also." The phrase "Our finest slop" could become "Textured protein". The art gets Inara's expression -- artificial food makes her frown. What we need is a contest to rewrite Inara's dialog! While we're at it, I want Jayne to say pecker.
Originally posted by Platonist:
Thanks for download, TWO
I’m glad I’m not the only one who thought Zack struggled with capturing Inara’s voice in particular, what little dialog she has, she sounds like a three year old at times and at others, a pendulant teenager. “Me too” “slop” and “Aw man” aren’t phrases she would use. She’s too intelligent, insightful, educated, and articulate to sound like Kaylee’s agreement echo who doesn’t formulate her own opinions.
Maybe next time;)
The Joss Whedon script for "Serenity", where Wash lives, is
Serenity-190pages.pdf at www.mediafire.com/two
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Agreed, the facial expressions are there, but the dialog is all wrong.
I’m not very good with writing dialog, but I think you have to look at the overall implications of that scene to get the dialog corrected, which is Mal wouldn't let her or Kaylee get off the ship to get supplies because he thought it too dangerous of an outpost AND he didn't bother to pick them up himself because something went wrong as he tells Wash, disappointing them, we already know Jayne spent some time in local Brothel…so when Kaylee enters, Inara might answer, “the usual, and you know why” and then a dagger eyed look at Mal, and so forth.
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Originally posted by DMI:Quote:
Originally posted by chrisisall:
Short but oh so very sweet!
Can they do this regularly? I'd pay & all...
May-haps we should write to someone...
The next Serenity form of media needs to have a 'Happy Holidy' theme to it. I don't care whether it's a Web Comic, an Actual Comic, an Animated Episode or just a YouTube video of The Cast&Crew saying "Happy Holidays"! Anything like that would just do good for me.
(((tO sPARK tHE mOVEMENT)))
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Quote:You asked for a Happy Holiday themed comic and you got it. At the same time I'm solving the problem of how could Kaylee and Book not be seen by Jayne? They hid behind the Christmas tree! All nine pages of my slight revision to Serenity - Downtime (2010) are here:
Originally posted by CortexOverride:
The next Serenity form of media needs to have a 'Happy Holiday' theme to it. I don't care whether it's a Web Comic, an Actual Comic, an Animated Episode or just a YouTube video of The Cast&Crew saying "Happy Holidays"! Anything like that would just do good for me.
Serenity-Downtime(2010)FanEdit.cbz (3.89 MB) at www.mediafire.com/?i34aqc7bae249zm
The Joss Whedon script for "Serenity", where Wash lives, is
Serenity-190pages.pdf at www.mediafire.com/two
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