Update on Trials and Redemptions
Thursday, 24 April 2008 03:57:05

Hi all! Chapter 5 of Trials and Redemptions should get posted either Friday or Saturday, just putting it through some final proof-reading. Just FYI, this is also posted on FanFiction.net if you prefer reading on there, my ID is the same there as here. I was pleased to receive a few comments on the first couple chapters. For clarity's sake, I thought I would put up a general response on them. A few people have commented that Simon seems a little stiff and lacking in compassion, particularly at the funeral. I'll agree I may have gone a little extreme, but there's a good reason for this that will appear in Chapter 7. River's third-person self-reference was addressed in Chapter 4, and I did note in my first entry that my vision of River is drastically different. However, I can certainly understand why some readers found it distracting. My theory on this is that River [i]rarely[/i] refers to herself in the first person in either the series or the film, mostly because she actually rarely talks at all. She never really has a conversation with anyone, she just comments as she sees fit. After Miranda is the first occasion where she's become able to have a real conversation. I don't see it ever going away completely, and it will re-surface whenever River becomes overly stressed, but it should be more limited over the rest of the story than in the first couple chapters. I had been under the impression that Mal and/or Jayne using "Kaylee-bear" as a nickname/diminutive was fanon, but apparently that may not be the case, and a few people found it OCC/irritating. Apologies if I've inadvertently stolen this from someone who was using it exclusively. I'd agree that I can see where it might be OCC for Jayne, but IMO, it seems very like Mal. I would very much appreciate hearing more of what people have to say, good, bad, or indifferent. However, it would be nice if they could be constructive comments, much like those I have gotten already! Thank much, everybody!