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Update on Trials and Redemptions
Thursday, April 24, 2008 3:57 AM
Hi all!Chapter 5 of Trials and Redemptions should get posted either Friday or Saturday, just putting it through some final proof-reading. Just FYI, this is also posted on FanFiction.net if you prefer reading on there, my ID is the same there as here.
I was pleased to receive a few comments on the first couple chapters. For clarity's sake, I thought I would put up a general response on them.
A few people have commented that Simon seems a little stiff and lacking in compassion, particularly at the funeral. I'll agree I may have gone a little extreme, but there's a good reason for this that will appear in Chapter 7.
River's third-person self-reference was addressed in Chapter 4, and I did note in my first entry that my vision of River is drastically different. However, I can certainly understand why some readers found it distracting. My theory on this is that River rarely refers to herself in the first person in either the series or the film, mostly because she actually rarely talks at all. She never really has a conversation with anyone, she just comments as she sees fit. After Miranda is the first occasion where she's become able to have a real conversation. I don't see it ever going away completely, and it will re-surface whenever River becomes overly stressed, but it should be more limited over the rest of the story than in the first couple chapters.
I had been under the impression that Mal and/or Jayne using "Kaylee-bear" as a nickname/diminutive was fanon, but apparently that may not be the case, and a few people found it OCC/irritating. Apologies if I've inadvertently stolen this from someone who was using it exclusively. I'd agree that I can see where it might be OCC for Jayne, but IMO, it seems very like Mal.
I would very much appreciate hearing more of what people have to say, good, bad, or indifferent. However, it would be nice if they could be constructive comments, much like those I have gotten already! Thank much, everybody!
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