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POSTED BY: AdamStevenson
UPDATED: Monday, July 21, 2008 14:20
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ADAMSTEVENSON

Friday, July 18, 2008 7:53 PM

To be honest Faith am not sure what I'm going to do with it yet, its just for the hell of it one night I got really wound up and the scene before you is what I wrote that day to get my feelings out. Next day I was like hey lets see if I can get a girl to reply to this and how better than a browncoat.

I liked what you did with it and I liked how you interrupted his long drawn out speech I had no idea it was that long almost 3 pages!!

The fact you dodged the last bit was kind of ok but kind of a cope out aswell and yes it was upon her, as in the girl.

Still it was a very good read and thanks for the help once I have enough replies I'll move on to another scene I think.

If living was as easy as dying we wouldn't bother

ADAMSTEVENSON

Friday, July 18, 2008 7:54 PM

FREELANCERTEX

Saturday, July 19, 2008 3:51 AM

OKAY. Finally got around to posting this.
bit of a warning though.

I am a weird person, and I don't exactly respond to situations like this the way most normal people would, so what follows is how I would respond if faced with someone telling me this, it seemed only natural. (some of it i improvised what some of her own demons might be; they gotta have something in common, right? )

I left in the bit you wrote, Adam, didnt know what the girl's name was, so i just left it as 'girl' :-P

INT. SMALL LIBRARY - DAY

A girl and ADAM enter a small Library. They sit in at a table in a corner facing each other, there is no one else in the library.

Their eyes meet, never leaving each other.

ADAM
This is who I am. Tennis and Terminator shows keep me up at night. I have these memories of my childhood and what the bullies did to me and what the teachers said to me…it still affects me. I feel age bearing down on me and I’m only 21, I have these crazy thoughts about hurting people and
(beat)
Rape.

ADAM (cont’d)
I have no life, spent time trying to fight the system when I have nothing outside of the system. Internet, MSN, TV, that’s all I have. I sit alone drinking in my room cursing the world and society all the while voices in my head—mostly from films—with questions or quotes then I hear a softer voice, and it keeps taunting me with the same fucking question.
(beat)
What does it mean to be human?

ADAM (cont’d)
(As he starts to cry)
And I don’t have a clue what it means, not one. And I see my friends getting on with their lives, dating, and I think why can’t I be like them? Why do I cry myself to sleep some nights? Why do I daydream about a life of fame and problem-free relationships instead of doing something about it?

ADAM (cont’d)
Its because I’m not like them at all; I’m different, and I’m not special like my parents used to say. I’m something else. I worry about bullshit that no one else cares about and I think of crap that could drive people crazy
(As he has a quick look around)
like: what is this place, you, me, what does it all mean? Does it mean anything?

A door banging alerts the two that someone else has enter the library, indicating that their time alone is short. (or, “library, disturbing their privacy”? dunno, throwin’ things out there)

ADAM (cont’d)
And amidst all of this is an aching feeling because I don’t know if I’m a good guy or a bad guy.
(starts to laugh out loud but it has a sad tone)
In a world where I believe in only black and white, I may be the only grey area I can accept.
(beat)
One of the worst things is that I have always wanted to tell you this. Before I knew anything about you. Just when I first saw you and learned your name, I wanted to open up to you and let all of it out. Upon you.
(beat)
Now what does that make me?

GIRL
It makes you human.

ADAM scoffs.

GIRL (cont’d)
Really. (reaching for his hand) Adam, we all have our demons; we all have things we can’t deal with, things we wish would just go away and stop haunting us, go bother someone else. The problem is we don’t do anything about them. We live under this impression that something is expected of us, that we’re supposed to be like all of our friends, that we’re supposed to live up to this cookie-cutter image of success, and if that’s what’s worrying you then I gotta tell you, it’s okay that you’re not like your friends, that you’re not ‘special’ like your parents always said you were.

He tries to look away but she squeezes his hand, forcing him to look at her.

GIRL (cont’d)
People worry about little shit. They may never admit it openly, but they do all the time. It’s human nature. I cry myself to sleep some nights because I don’t know who I am, and it kills me. But I’m doing something about it. I’m going out there and trying things, trying to find my niche because I’m scared I won’t find anything. And maybe I never will.

ADAM
But at least you’re trying. All I do is dream; I can’t take that next step

ADAMSTEVENSON

Saturday, July 19, 2008 3:35 PM

Hey that we pretty good and more of a response I was looking for apart from maybe the taking of the hand but then it worked in the scene.

a few more replies and I could maybe complete that scene and move on to another one maybe in a field somewhere, problem is I don't have any anger or anything to get me juiced up enough to write the next part.

But I still have sometime.

If living was as easy as dying we wouldn't bother

FREELANCERTEX

Sunday, July 20, 2008 4:57 AM

need help with the anger bit?

*needs something to do*

ADAMSTEVENSON

Sunday, July 20, 2008 2:46 PM

lol I feel maybe its something I need to do, I need to feel angry to make my character go on a rant like that. If you have any ideas on how to get angry please let me know.

If living was as easy as dying we wouldn't bother

FREELANCERTEX

Sunday, July 20, 2008 11:19 PM

lol that depends. what pisses u off?

ADAMSTEVENSON

Monday, July 21, 2008 12:30 PM

I'm not sure right now lol. Political correctness is one, people who are overly left wing. People that are so up there own ass they don't take the time to think or look at other people.

Those girls in high school that thought that they were it and high school was the end all and be all of life.

Stuff like that.

If living was as easy as dying we wouldn't bother

FREELANCERTEX

Monday, July 21, 2008 2:20 PM

lolz, i totally saw that coming. XD too bad i don't know anyone like that :-P i do run into a lot of idiotic people though, but theyre more funny than they are infuriating.

ive got an idea, watch a political debate, see if something doesnt piss you off XD i can't even watch em, i go through the roof

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