Just put up my first ever fanfic...

POSTED BY: BulletInTheBrainPanSquish
UPDATED: Sunday, October 28, 2007 08:16
VIEWED: 2174
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BULLETINTHEBRAINPANSQUISH

Thursday, October 25, 2007 10:45 AM

And I'm already nervous. Any tips from fanfic pros about how to deal with the waiting and wondering? (Yes, this is a shameless plug. Feel free to carry on the shamelessness).

"Kaylee, find that kid who's takin a dirt nap with Baby Jesus: we need a hood ornament!"

BORNTOFLY

Thursday, October 25, 2007 12:10 PM

Nothin' to be nervous about.

It was a great read.

I hope you become a regular poster like I dream of having the skill to be.

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Forsaken initiate.

DONCOAT

Saturday, October 27, 2007 1:52 PM

Read and enjoyed. For some reason I couldn't give a rating (got some moonbrain error message when I tried). I would have given an 8, and I'm a fairly harsh critic.

I noticed a couple minor grammatical errors, nothing too distracting. You did a pretty nice job with the character voices. Writing from River's perspective is a challenge, but that came out pretty well too. I would have liked for River to be a bit more subtle in nudging Jayne into action -- somehow saying just the right thing to prod him into noticing Kaylee's problem. As it was, she pretty much just told him to go help Kaylee.

One thing I did notice was several places where you used the Commonwealth spelling of "defence" for "defense". It caused my American eyes to stumble a bit, but arguably it's reasonable that some British influence would linger in the 'verse.

Now, feel free to read and critique my one and only fan fic (so far)... fair's fair!

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I'm pointin' right at it!

THEQUICKBROWNFOX

Saturday, October 27, 2007 3:09 PM

Really good start! You gotta keep on writing--(so i can keep on reading--I know thats harder on you than on me --i'm shameless!) Hahaha! Mine is an evil laugh! Don't know why but i could not post a comment directly after your Fic--i kept getting an error or something. :)

From one thing, learn ten thousand things.

BULLETINTHEBRAINPANSQUISH

Sunday, October 28, 2007 8:08 AM

Hi All,

Just wanted to thank you all for the lovely messages and encouragement. I will definitely be writing and posting again.

"Kaylee, find that kid who's takin a dirt nap with Baby Jesus: we need a hood ornament!"

WYTCHCROFT

Sunday, October 28, 2007 8:16 AM

Quote:
Originally posted by BulletInTheBrainPanSquish:
Hi All,

Just wanted to thank you all for the lovely messages and encouragement. I will definitely be writing and posting again.

Shiny!:)