RP - Out of Character Commentary - "Badger's Betrayal" or "Adventures in Gunrunning"

POSTED BY: Astriana
UPDATED: Monday, January 19, 2004 16:42
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CAPNRAHN

Sunday, January 18, 2004 3:48 AM

Heh, I got that engineerin' itch!

Can't just look purty, it's gotta work!

Spending 6 years working on B-52s and KC-135s sorta helped me get that ... um ... picky

The sorta purple/blue things are the shuttles ... the aft ones I fergot to put back in on the dorsal view after I noticed I had a superstructre-blocking-the-shuttle problem.

Yellow showing where the engine 'wing' is at in the side view

Red is the Captain's gig and main Bridge.

OK I'm gonna start a DragonFly thread ... soz I can show off and get ideas W/O cluttering up this here OCC!

WATCH THIS SPACE FER A LINK to *RP Green Room for "Procrustian Karma"* ( I HAD to use it!!!)...

http://fireflyfans.net/thread.asp?b=17&t=3407&m=34504#3450434504

JAQUILE

Sunday, January 18, 2004 5:16 AM

I'd just like to say, that I love what you all are doing here, and have to complement you all on the excellent writing. It really (mostly) reads like just another episode. And seeing as to the excellent quality of all the Firefly episodes, that is helluva job.

But now, curiosity has gotten the best of me. I've got a quick question about the little firefight that went down in act one, but before I ask the question (and cause I don't want to make you run back through all of act one to find the posts), I've taken the time to grab all the relevent portions of the posts in their chronological order, and prefaced them with the characters whom is taking the action. Pay attention to the numbers.

Quote:
(EARLY) 12 men, plus Early and Niska. The deadly team opens the bay door of Niska's ship and they float silently into space. Towards Serenity.

Quote:
(ZOE) Creeps quietly through the ship, gun positioned against her shoulder, keeping an eye out for intruders. As she nears the entrance of the Cargo Bay, she slows and checks the positioning of Niska's men. Seeing a clean shot from her cover, she opens fire, taking out those in her sights.

Quote:
(NISKA) NISKA ducks down as ZOE kills three of his henchmen

Quote:
(MAL) Signals Zoe that all is well with him, six dead.

Quote:
(JAYNE) Jayne gets to the walkway above the cargo bay, take a quick look around to get the enemy positioning, and takes two quick bursts shots with Vera. The powerful rounds rain down onto Niksa's men taking one through the throat, passing through to stike the man behind him in the abdomen, both fly back and crumple in a heap. Several rounds ricochet around the hold while more rounds find their deadly journey's end in Niksa's men. At the end of the short exchange 8 of the intruders lie dead or dying on the cargo floor between Mal and his shots.

So we've got 3 killed by Zoe. 6 Killed by Mal. 2 that Jayne shot, and Jayne claims in total, between him and Mal, they killed 8. Well, hate to break it to Jayne, but 6+2 is 8, so he didn't get anymore kills added to his belt. Of course, long as Mal's not there to say how many he shot, Jayne can get away with the bragging

But that's not the important thing. The important thing is that 3+6+2=11. And there were 12 men (Unless of course, Early can't count. And while I am highly suspicious of his mental state, I do believe that he wouldn't make a mistake like that when going into a combat situation... plus, ya don't need to take off your shoes to count to twelve, just use each foot as one... :)

Now... where'd that last one go? ^_^

CAPNRAHN

Sunday, January 18, 2004 5:19 AM

Ummm ... he scarpered!

And we still have Niska!

"Remember, there is only ONE absolute - There ARE NO absolutes!!!"

HUMBLE

Sunday, January 18, 2004 5:32 AM

Jaquile-Thanks for pointing that out. Being that Jayne is not exactly burdened with and over-abundance of schooling, I'd say he erred in his count in the heat of battle. Maybe that's something we can change in editing?

CAPNRAHN

Sunday, January 18, 2004 8:15 AM

Oh , yes, we can fix the number or just have the bloke scarper, rabbit, exit stage left ...

... boy I AM tired...

"Remember, there is only ONE absolute - There ARE NO absolutes!!!"

ASTRIANA

Monday, January 19, 2004 12:28 AM

Yeah, I think we can change that in editing. Either Zoe can take out 4, or Jayne can take out 3 (making him & Zoe even )

~A~

...I'm still free,
You can't take the sky from me.

MANIACNUMBERONE

Monday, January 19, 2004 1:11 AM

...not sure if Jayne or wash were in the bridge with Book, so he just spoke to the open air. I hope someone was in there. If not, where are they?

CAPNRAHN

Monday, January 19, 2004 4:55 AM

BTW; I posted the script version of the Infirmary scenes. Unfortuatly, the format did not cross over.

I did the editing on my PDA and forgot to use the html coding for italacs, bold and so forth.

But it is posted ... tried to cut and paste all of the relavant bits that linked to the Infirmary Set. Also, I did as little editing as possible. Ya know, keep the flavor and all that.

Gonna try the other scenes later ... (yawwwn, not enuff sleep )

oh ... the link ...

http://fireflyfans.net/thread.asp?b=17&t=3409

Let me know what ya think.

"Remember, there is only ONE absolute - There ARE NO absolutes!!!"

ZACHSMIND

Monday, January 19, 2004 2:25 PM

Stopped in briefly to see what's up. Yes Wash is on the bridge now and apparently so is Jayne, but Jayne has reported having souped up the Mule which is quite a trick cuz Zoe, Mal & Kaylee took the mule with them didn't they? I mean, they went to get the cargo. So I need some clarification before I can continue my move.

One possible solution is that Niska's men may have brought with them a second mule. That's a bit of a stretch though. I'm just looking for an answer that won't disrupt anyone's moves.

Yes, I believe Mal took a radio with him, but generally Wash wouldn't call Mal on it cuz he might catch Mal at a time inappropriate for the thing. Wash could however 'beep' Mal, I suppose. Shall Wash do that?

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"Hang on, travelers..."

GEEZER

Monday, January 19, 2004 2:57 PM

Maniac

re the alliance comms Book is intercepting: Thorne is a native of Hara, not an off-worlder. Probably pretty well known to the local constables, too. This is important to his storyline, so if you could do some tweaking I'd appreciate it. Perhaps throw in another line when the cops get closer. i.e. "Stupid rookie. Thats not an off-worlder, it's just Thorne."

Edit: see you fixed it. Too many threads to juggle.

"Keep the Shiny side up"

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