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BOOK OF DAYS SERIES: #31. "All Good Things Must Come to an End - Chapter 4"

Tuesday, April 18, 2006

Kaylee and Inara need some time. Mal and Simon don't know what to do to help them. Simon/Kaylee. Mal/Inara. PLEASE read the warning in Chapter 1 before continuing. 31st story in a series.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4149    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Again, please let this play out to its end before getting too mad. There's a lot to go. At least 8 stories with multiple chapters in a lot of them. This one has at least 5 chapters.

Review and let me know how you think its going. Guess how it will all turn out or let me know what you'd like to see.

This hasn't been an easy story to write but I hope I'm treating the characters with the same amount of respect as I am trying to treat the subject matter.

Everyone has diffrent reactions to this sort of trauma, this is my vision of how the characters in the Firefly 'verse would handle it.

As always, please read the warning contained in Chapter 1 as the subject matter might be offensive to some.

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Chapter 4

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“Inara?” Mal stepped tentatively into the shuttle, calling her name. She’d been on edge and he didn’t want to add to any tension.

Her voice was soft, tender as she answered. “Yes, Mal?”

“Ready to talk about it?” He noticed her sitting on the couch just closing a data pad.

She set the pad on the low table in front of her and rested her hands in her lap. “I’m – I’m not sure there is much to say.”

Mal swallowed reflexively, afraid that she was keeping something from him. She’d been distant and he wanted to know why. Wanted to help. “You been pretty distant. Somethin’ happen ya don’t want anyone to know?” He took a seat beside her and was encouraged when she didn’t flinch like she had the last time.

Inara looked away. “It’s – just some old memories, Mal. Nothing to concern yourself too terribly over.”

Mal exhaled a breath he didn’t realize he’d been holding. Old memories? How could she think he wouldn’t be concerned? “Know you can lean on me, right? And I don’t just mean for the sexin’.” His attempt at levity went unanswered which wiped the small smile off his face in an instant.

“I – I can’t talk about it right now, Mal.”

He frowned. Perhaps he had been too hopeful that she would confide in him. They’d been through so much together. B

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 15:31
Excellent work. I love that you're taking the time to look at so many angles of such a painful issue; not that I like the pain but this is a real world issue that to many people only look at from one side. Keep it up.
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 15:34
You're handling this volatile subject so beautifully. Those that have'nt in some way experienced this kind of event, can now maybe understand the extreme depths of emotion that follow. Well done!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 15:50
Very well done- I like how you give the points of view of all the characters without losing the poignancy of the actual issue.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 17:31
"He nodded slowly, and glanced down at his hands.

Wordlessly, she leaned against his shoulder and he lifted his arm to drape it over her, offering silent comfort where he knew any words would fail."

I think this was beautifully done, Mal realizing he couldn't help her, Inara realizing he needed to try. I also loved the Mal/Simon conversation. On some level, they must both suspect. And poor Kaylee, the only doctor on board being her husband. It would kill him to see what they did to her (if in fact they did do it).

Maybe Zoe should make an attempt to speak to the girls? I wonder if she hasn't experienced something similar, maybe during the war. And if she did, I wonder if Mal knows, if he helped her through it maybe. Okay, now I'm rambling. Anyway, I think you're handling this whole thing extremely well. Post more soon, k?

-Kaynara

Tuesday, 18 April 2006 18:11
You really do know how to get a girl's tears flowin' hun!

I was just reading this and it's so perfect, it has just the right amount of angst and truth. I think the characterization is amazing, everyone's reactions to everything...

Amazing, as always!

Update soon!
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 20:05
Wow, just, wow... perfection, as always. I always love your posts. Heartwrenching, this.
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 20:16
I've been trying to review this for a little while, but there's been nothing to say. I don't mind being able to identify with the characters while I'm reading, but this crossed a bit into the realm of "too-personal". Regardless of my attachment to the topic, you're an excellent writer, and I will <i> try </i> to finish the story, if for that (and the possibility of a happy ending) only. :)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 20:48
You keep everyone so in character so well - and your writing flows so beautifully - thanks!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 21:48
aww, I really love this story.
It's great how Mal tries to be there for Inara! Come on, 'Nara, tell him. He'll help :)

Please post more soon!

CCke (too lazy to log in)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 22:47
Excellent but painful. Sooner or later Inara and Kaylee are going to have to trust their men otherwise no relationship can really stand the test of time. That Mal and Simon are giving them the space to talk and work out their worries is all well and good but River is right, they can't hide forever and the men will help if they let them. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 19 April 2006 01:28
Absolutely amazing! I love the moments between River and the different members of the crew and the moment between Mal and Simon was great. It's heart-warming to see the two men able to come together and help each other, even if they both feel helpless. I can't wait to see how this all plays out. Keep pulling at those heartstrings.
Wednesday, 19 April 2006 03:15
This...this was amazing, Leiasky:) Have always thought Mal and Simon were rather similiar to one another and could have these kinds of quiet moments if they were on the same wavelength emotionally.

While I have never gone through a rape situation and have not consciously met someone who had, I really think you are doing a superior bit of writing in having these characters deal with such an act realistically.

BEB
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 19 April 2006 05:46
you're hitting it spot on. it's one of those things that you feel as if no one will understand if you tell them what you feel. you know you're hurting them, but your hurt is much, much more.
beautiful job.
Wednesday, 19 April 2006 06:23
beautifully done love! *bows down in awe* now if only I could get it in my brain to write more PLOT than smut... BUT I LOVE THE SMUT SO!!! *runs screaming* I KNOW TOO MUCH
Friday, 21 April 2006 15:22
Well done
Thursday, 04 May 2006 03:30
Excellent, excellent, excellent. I thought you captured everyone's voice perfectly. I liked that Simon feels he can't give Kaylee this time. It's so heart wrentching, I love this stuff.
Wednesday, 24 May 2006 12:03
I can definitely feel the shift in your works between chapters 30 and 31. You have switched the mood around wonderfully, and it still remains very well written.

Very nice final scene with Mal and Simon.

Saturday, 03 June 2006 02:03
i really can't find words to describe this. the topic you're covering is a hard one to do but you're definately doing it justice. the characterization is great and it's wonderful writing. there's something more that i want to say about it and how good and truthful it is, but i can't seem to put it into words. a definate 10. you really are a great writer.

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