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Forward Motion - Part 4

Monday, April 17, 2006

River's slide into dementia is fully revealed, while the rest of the crew tries to determine how to handle it. Plus, Inara comes back on board. Mal/Inara, Simon/Kaylee

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River was on the bridge again, it being the only place where she could get any semblance of peace. It was the farthest point on board from her brother’s room and the engine room, which were too places that nearly oozed with sexual overtones now that he was with Kaylee. She was happy for him, but that was just, well, gross.

Jayne spent most of his time in the cargo bay, lifting weights when they weren’t on a job. Not that his thoughts really bothered her; he had so few. And Zoe, well, she had always been quiet, more so now that Wash was gone. Her presence had only been overwhelming to River once, in the first few seconds after Wash’s life had been ended. The seconds of pain that followed had nearly drowned River in despair until abruptly they had vanished. If River ever got the nerve to ask her, she would question Zoe about how she had managed to build such strong mental barriers. River suspected she could learn some good lessons from the woman.

Faintly, River could sense Mal and Inara’s presences a few hundred yards from the ship. But that she didn’t mind so much – it was about time. And at such a distance, it was easier to block out. So, she was again quiet, but she was not alone.

She had felt the small tugs to the edges of her brain over the past few days. Had sensed the urgent need by someone or something to enter into that private place. Whatever it was, it did not come with good intentions and River had been fighting it valiantly. She had left her own protective walls up for longer and longer periods of time, almost fainting again, but somehow managing to make it through. She had worked to gain back some of the sanity the Persephone debacle had taken out of her and she would not lose it, not again.

But she suspected she didn’t have much of a choice. The presence that was trying to invade her senses was blue and that meant it was strong, unrelenting and unwilling to lose. She was quite simply locked in a battle of wills, and she knew with a certainty that only omniscience could bring it

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Monday, 17 April 2006 21:33
Well, was he any good?! AHHHH! That was a mean and evil place to end it! I was looking forward to some girl talk about their men! whine

And Kaylee telling Simon she loved him....oh, he should have gone after her! River was asleep. Stupid boob! One day he'll learn a few words, a hug or a kiss would go a long way to reassuring the girl.

So now Simon is going to be torn between his sister and Kaylee...uh oh.
Monday, 17 April 2006 21:35
Oh, Simon put his foot in his mouth again bigtime.

I love your characterization, the way the story flows, the way you have all of the different character perspectives in there like you do.

Very well done, I'd love to see more soon!
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 17 April 2006 22:48
Hhhm very good but River has me worried. I have a feeling she won't warn them about the Captain's old friend even when they are close enough for her to be sure because she'll be worrying too much about being crazy again. Poor River. I do hope Simon can help her and lovely to see Mal and Inara giving in to their feelings for each other. About gorram time! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 01:37
This is some might interesting stuff you have here, TamSibling....though I am not sure if having River "revert" is the best plot device. Though it does ramp up the tension a bit;)

My main concern besides River is Simon and Kaylee. Presumably, Kaylee knows Simon loves her from the time they have spent together post-Miranda. Having her (and Simon too) go back to the pre-BDM state of fumbling for a stable pattern of things seems too easy a cliche or plot device. Simon focusing on River is on-target and angsty...but having Kaylee give up (even with the lifeline she threw Simon) seems a bit too much of a step back for the two of them.

BEB
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 02:16
>>>Having her (and Simon too) go back to the pre-BDM state of fumbling for a stable pattern of things seems too easy a cliche or plot device.

It's not so much that she's given up on Simon, it's just that she knows there's not point in trying to push him to pay attention to her. She told him she loves him to snap him out of his "tunnel vision" so that he would reach out to her. When he doesn't, she knows that she just needs to leave him be for a bit.

The other thing is, Simon is really concerned for River's health - she's passed out once and is close to completely losing it. Simon truly fears she could cause herself to be completely ill and that's why he has to focus his attention on her, and not Kaylee. Which Kaylee does understand - but she doesn't necessarily have to like it!

>>>I am not sure if having River "revert" is the best plot device.

I attest that River was never really cured after Miranda, she was just a little better. Plus, if you had the blue-handed men trying to get into your brain, how sane do you think you'd be?

Sorry, if I haven't explained the blue hands place in this story well enough. My point is that they are doing their best to break down her mental barriers and get at her so that she is vulnerable.

Hopefully the next chapter will shed some more light on both of these concerns BEB. I may post it tonight - maybe although I warn you that I will take some liberty with the Blue-Handed Men's history in order to make the story work. Since we don't really know much about them, I feel there's a little room there to play.

Thanks for reading and commenting!
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 03:05
yay! I am really enjoying the development between Inara and Mal (and you've got his style of communication down tight!).

I have to admit, I got a bit tight in the throat and that sad smile as Zoe repeated back those lines of Wash's ("this land"), a very sweet moment for her. Also, while it would be totally out of character for Zoe, I wish there was some way for Simon to know that Zoe has some talents that would be good for River. Might help Zoe, making her interact with people again (outside of her duties on the ship)...

can't wait for the next one...
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 18 April 2006 04:11
I like that River has not actually recovered. Not that I don't like River or anything. I just think that the events of Miranda - profound as they were - wouldn't be enough to completely reverse the effects of the acadamy. Besides, her brain is still physically damaged; grey matter doesn't just grow back.

And trying so hard to be normal, trying to be what the crew wants and needs is such a River thing to do, after everything they have done for her. Especially since the Captain seems to have adopted her as his pet atonement-for-past-sins project, she wouldn't let him down if she could help it.

Anyway, great work. I look forward to reading on.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 10 May 2006 23:06
The funniest and the saddest posting I've ever read. I dont know if its because of my current emotional state of crappyness or what but the scene with Simon waking River and Kaylee entering brought me to tears. It was so perfectly beautiful. And Kaylee asking Inara is the Cap'n was any good was so Kaylee and so very well written. This is amazing and I am totally hooked. Keep it up.

xSweetSerenityx
Thursday, 08 June 2006 17:04
Very shiny chapter, I am so worried for River though.

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