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Fateful Hours Conclusion

Saturday, March 6, 2004

Time to go home...

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(Disclaimers with Part 1. Thanks for reading through to the end--please, leave a comment if you enjoyed the story!)

"Fateful Hours" Conclusion by HawkMoth

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The journey back to the port wasn't the long painful walk Mal had anticipated. Not only did they have an escort, they went in style seated in an open patrol wagon driven by Constable Harris. The sheriff sent along another deputy to ride shotgun.

All seemed relatively peaceful as they drove through town. There were still lawmen on patrol in small groups, and not too many regular folks about. If there had been any major disturbances or civil unrest, they didn't see any evidence of it. Of course, they still didn't have any real idea of what had gone on after the attack on the rally.

The only thing Mal truly cared about was getting back to Serenity, and out of his disguise. His longing to be off this world and back in the sky was so strong that it was making his head ache again. He sat in broody silence, only half-listening as Book talked with the deputy, skillfully pumping him for information on the day's events.

It turned out that the plot had been engineered by Magistrate Langston's nephew, who was a commissioner in the next province. His plan, it seemed, had been to make it look as if the magistrate himself had been after his son, and cause a breach in the family and and the political factions.

"Wanted to move in and take over here himself," the deputy opined. "Only place he'll be moving now is a prison cell, alongside his hired goons."

Huh, thought Mal. Let 'em rot there. If only they had landed on a different day, or if their contact had chosen another place for the meet--timing was everything, and why was his always so lousy?

Dusk was settling in when they arrived at the port. Harris carefully maneuvered the transport through the roadways, following Book's directions. "This will be just fine, Constable," he said, urging a halt. "Our ship's just over there."

Serenity was still some distance away

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 06 March 2004 04:19
OH WOW!

My favorite fanfic. I love it!
The biggest strength is it reads like an episode. Your dialogue is incredible. I can see this on the show.

Anyway, incredible job. Love the ending.
Sunday, 07 March 2004 11:00
Excellent, thank you very much for posting this. It was also good to be able to read them one after the other so quickly as it kept the tension and pace.

Thank you again
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 31 March 2004 04:26
Loved the whole story, how you keep the charaters real. Just love it!!!!!
Keep up the good work.
ANONYMOUS
Saturday, 12 March 2005 22:09
Another great story!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 04 September 2005 05:40
This is the first story I've read here and what a way to start. Its certainly the bar high for everything else I might read.
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 05 October 2005 17:05
Wonderful story! Everyone was so in character. And aww, and we get a little Inara/Mal moment at the end. How sweet.

Thanks, from one happy reader!
Monday, 19 December 2005 15:22
Wow!
This fic was really great!

I absolutly love the dialogue - everyone seemed perfectly in character. I do like the idea that you had of having Mal dress up as a Shepperd - it was great how you had him warring within himself with belief/non-belief.

Keep up the good work!
Wednesday, 01 August 2007 18:47
Great finish, and as others have said, it definitely reads like an episode and the dialogue is spot-on! Great writing.

Thanks for sharing it!

:-)

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