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Going Home

Friday, February 6, 2004

Why didn't Mal just settle down on Shadow after the War? And how did he get the money to buy "Serenity"?

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3458    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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GOING HOME

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Abject gratitude to Tara O’Shea/LJC for her incredibly useful Mandarin glossary and for being such a damned good writer.

ONE

He was home.

After years of blood and dirt on a dozen battlefields; after nine weeks in an Alliance holding camp being “processed for release” (nice words for crowded holding cells, pointless debriefings, long hours in the dark thinking about what might have been and what was); after a hard two months hitching rides on any ship that would let him work off passage, he was finally back on Shadow, back at the ranch. Home.

It was the same as when he’d left, and yet everything was different.

He stood in the doorway of the old house, hand resting against the rough wood of the door frame. He could feel the layers of paint against the skin of his palm, reminders of the times his ma had ordered him to whitewash the trim on the doors and windows—“Keeping it fresh-lookin’,” she’d said, “So folks won’t think we’re no `count fèhuà as don’t care about the upkeep of the place.” What she’d say now, if she could see the dust and cobwebs . . . . He could imagine her, fists against her hips and arms akimbo, shaking her head in disgust. “Men is pigs,” she’d have muttered and gone off for a mop and pail.

The long hallway back to the kitchen was dark and quiet. So too was the kitchen, its broad table covered with a layer of dust that told how long it’d been since it had fed a dozen hungry ranch hands. His boots made a cold hard sound on the wood floor as he walked slowly up the narrow staircase, first to his old room—bed made, things put away by his ma after he’d flown off in his hurry to fight for Independence—and then to his ma’s. Someone had stripped the sh

Comments
Friday, 06 February 2004 05:26
wow. What a wonderful piece of writing! Very well written and very touching. I think you did an excellent job of characterizing Mal! I love your original characters as well. Great job!
Friday, 06 February 2004 12:24
Loved the ending, my only regret is there was no mention of Zoe. You tied this in really well and I thank you for a shiny story. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 06 February 2004 17:49
Wow, what a read! You've done a fantastic job - bring on some more....
Ms.Sam
Friday, 06 February 2004 17:56
Great story!
Friday, 06 February 2004 22:29
Please write more Mal angst! :) ;) I would love to see a sequel to this story that has what happened between the end of this story and where we pick up in the TV series.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 05:18
I must say, this is probably the best fanfiction I've read, well, ever. Your writing style is smooth and fluid and Mal's dialogue reads exactly like the show sounds. Mal's inner dialogue is also illuminating without contradicting any of his established character. Your use of Mandarin is obviously well-planned-- and well-spelled! It serves exactly the same purpose here as in the show: to spice up dialogue without being too distracting. Your characterization of Mal's friends and family (the caring but naive Junie, his tough-as-nails ma, his violent and alcoholic pa) all served to further his character rather than muddle it. My criticisms are minor- as others have said, a mention of Zoe would have been nice and some minor personification of Serenity would not have been out of place there at the end (Mal is, after all, falling in love with "the tenth character"; Serenity is hardly an "it"). In all, a superb job!
Friday, 17 March 2006 21:24
Nicely done. Seems you and I have the same ideas about Mal - he wasn't always a war-weary veteran Firefly captain and tended to associate with some pretty colorful, but solid folk.

Several moments of brilliance stood out in this. I'll send those along in a PM later, along with some advisements. I find I'm always tweaking my stuff. I figure you must be the same.

Write only what you would love to read yourself, I always say. And keep Mary Sue safely chained up in the back of a really dank walk-in closet. Where she belongs.
Friday, 07 April 2006 01:17
Well I've started reading all the fanfics on this site. I've only just gotten to G and so far this is one of the best ones I read. it's truly amazing. You've done everything really well.
Friday, 12 May 2006 21:46
i'm doing a similar thing to silence, just goin by author. and this is a fine example of what should have been a flashback in the series...even if it wasn't in as much detail, just to fill in gaps which you've done perfectly.

same critism as everyone else...Zoe.
SOLILOQUYGIRL
Sunday, 28 May 2006 08:42
I gotta say, this was damn good. I love that you filled in that gap between the war and Serenity. Like others have said, your style is smooth and your characterization (Mal and your own) are hella good. I really loved how you took each place that Mal had obviously loved on Shadow and showed how he had changed and therefore how these places had changed. And as a side note, you dealt with my favorite theme: Mal's spirituality. So of course, I'm all over that. Again, thanks for giving us a fine piece of reading.
Tuesday, 29 August 2006 04:30
Excellent work, I must say. Every time I come across another talented writer, it's like discovering burried treasure, or something. It seems that LeeH hasn't posted new fic in a long while. Perhaps if there's enough pleading and groveling, she may grace us with another gem soon? Please? Pretty please?

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