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Pretty Fits: Part 8

Tuesday, January 24, 2006

Yes, yes...finally! Inara makes a pretty big decision and yes...something else of import happens. R&R.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3484    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Chapter 8

Mal and Zoe twisted off their helmets and Jayne bumped into Simon none too gently as he pushed past him to put up his suit, eager for solitary.

“Wash, time to go.” Mal directed at Wash, who was walking through the door.

“Ten Four Captain. Any particular course?” Wash’s voice echoed throughout the room.

“Somewhere…not here, for now.” Mal pursed his lips together and looked over at Simon sorting through the medicines.

“Our fuel cells won’t hold out much longer. Maybe got two, three days max long as we don’t push her too hard.” At the Captain’s nod, he turned and headed back up for the bridge.

Mal turned to Simon and said, “Doc, you take what you need and then let me know what we got. Zoe, send a WAVE to Brennert, see if he’s got a mind to deal.”

“Yes sir.” Zoe stowed her suit and then left the cargo bay.

Mal put his suit away and left Simon to his task at hand. As he moved to enter the common area River stood in the doorway unmoving and stared up at Mal. He huffed and opened his mouth to ask her to move when she piped up. “The lights on the tree went out. They’re dim now.”

Mal turned his face up into a comical uh huh and then she continued very seriously, as if she were consoling him, “Don’t worry, the light will come back. It just got too hot.”

Mal stood unblinking at her for the span of several seconds before nodding and adding, “Good to know.”

He moved closer to the doorway and River stepped aside to let him pass through. She watched him as he walked past the infirmary.

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Inara gently switched off the monitor and pulled the fabric back over her cortex screen slowly; her mind racing.

“I could just leave.” She thought to herself. “I could leave and then they wouldn’t have to deal with…they wouldn’t have to know. I could spare them.”

She stood and turned around to see River sitting calmly on her bed.

“River. Sweetie?”

River sat with her hands in her lap and her head bent to the left with a far away look in her eyes. Inara noticed something almost li

Comments
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 05:02
"Rest assured Mal. I want nothing to do with your coattails."-love that line, it's so Inara. Loved Simon dropping the "goods" to get to Kaylee. And Mal's concern for Kaylee getting well was very sweet. Can't wait to see what happens next with Inara and some Kaylee/Simon time!!!:D:D:D
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 05:06
oh no, nara don't leave!!! no no no! .... sorry got caught up there ... good job on the new chapter, been waiting so yay!! i'm so glad kaylee's back up and really hoping that another rollarcoaster is not soon to come although i know there is probably lots of that in the future :P i like your river voice, and the rest of your characterization, both are hard to get down pat. again, shiny job!
keep flyin' (and writin')
EngienAngel
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 05:59
Wow...Simon even drops his meds. Now THAT'S dedication.

Now, it's time for the next one. Lord knows Mal will waste more fuel chasing Inara down.
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 07:00
Gypsy, this is...so rich. I thought the last parts were gorram good, but this? It sings like James Taylor, it's that amazing to me.

Fave line: "The older woman’s thoughts raced while she mentally impugned herself. “Nara?” Kaylee’s voice pulled at Inara’s heart from within her chest. " but honestly, so hard to choose just one.

Loved the humor. You've got a deft hand at it. Loved the "slung" when Simon put the supplies down. Love the crew hackin' on Jayne and his "what?" Perfect. This is all perfect. HATED Inara leaving, but even the way you did it was perfect.

And Kaylee arising? With River making sure 'Nara was there for it, first hinting to the companion that she knows what's what? Amazing.

Such a gift. Such a story. More more more, is my song to you.

Tuesday, 24 January 2006 13:50
Don't stop there... it's just mean.
I can't believe I hadn't found this series before, it's excellent.
Can't wait for the next installment.

Taya
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 15:25
i love this series it's excellent keep up the excellent write you do
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 15:32
I too loved the dropping of the meds, can't wait for more Silee goodness :) And nnoooooooo 'Nara can't leave!!!
~ misskitten
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 15:47
Yipee! More good stuff! Write faster,please.....
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 18:06
I've said it before and I'll say it again.

You are the best :)

Please keep them coming. You have this uncanny knack of surprising me just when I have lost hoping of seeing the next installment.

I really hope they come more often. It keeps me going :)
Tuesday, 24 January 2006 23:45
What Washie said... You do got a way, that's for sure, specially with the River making sure Inara was there for Kaylee.

Okay, I cant really select it all..cuz I loved the whole thing, but...YEAH! Nice use of the word impugned. :)

And...I loved this line:

“What happened?” Kaylee looked more confused and vulnerable than the companion had ever thought possible.

And then the other when Kaylee spoke, she tore Inara's heart...SAME HERE! AW!

And with what Anonymous said...Not fair. You make us wait for more and then cliffhanger?! AHH!! I'll live... Just know, I have way more reviews where this comes from. ;)

JESSCLIFTON
Sunday, 29 January 2006 05:01
Awesome update! Inara better come back. And yay! Kaylee is okay. Can't wait to read more.
Monday, 06 February 2006 21:22
*chains inara to radiator* stay! honestly, it's the only way...

b
Saturday, 11 February 2006 17:29
Just got caught up on this series, it's really great, please post more!
JAYLEELOVE
Wednesday, 22 February 2006 17:42
My dear, you are a very talented writer! You have a gift for dialogue, and have SUCH an engaging story. I'm enjoying every chapter, and can't wait for more.

I did notice one line that jarred me out of the story a bit:

"As the moment passed Zoe scrutinized Jayne, noticing a faint but strong expression pass over his face ever so briefly. Relief? Ease?"

The phrase 'faint but strong' is kind of an oxymoron. But I know what you *meant*. The emotion itself was powerful, and he definately meant it, but it was quick, and almost unnoticeable.

For the love of all that is in this gorram 'verse, keep writing! :-)
Monday, 22 May 2006 02:23
Just finished reading this whole series in one sitting, and I'm not finding the end. Am I not looking properly? Please let me know where part 9 is.
Tuesday, 27 September 2011 05:28
This is an insanely shiny fic, I know it's a few years old, but have you thought about finishing it? ;) because that would be quite fantastic!

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