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Pretty Fits: Part 7

Sunday, January 8, 2006

Finally! I know. What made that proxemity alarm go off? Just adding a little fuel to the fire. More drama ensues. And just in case you want to reread the last bit of chapter 6 to get in the "Pretty Fit" frame of mind...here ya go
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CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3412    RATING: 9.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/T: None of these characters, nor the ‘verse are mine and I get no monetary gain for fic writing…just fun…lots and lots of fun.

Chapter 7

River swayed back and forth with her eyes closed as if she could hear music and said in a sing songy voice, "Full pockets and an empty heart. Bodies couldn’t fight it…too weak…too soon. It's too soon to know..." As River suddenly halted her movements and opened her eyes she saw a body silhouetted in the doorway. "And too late for you..."

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Mal looked at Wash expectantly as he and Book rushed into the bridge to meet him, Zoe, and Jayne who were already gathered there, staring out into a not so empty space.

“Someone wanna tell me what the hell is goin’ on?” Mal spoke with concern but still radiated his ire from before.

“Looks to be stranded.” Wash explained and looked up at Mal while flipping switches and adjusting controls. He sounded surprised as he said, “It’s a later model med-ship, maybe a 62-10. I’m reading no people onboard and no aux life support.” Wash paused and then offered, “Med-ships don‘t get stranded. There‘s way too much cash just built right into ‘em.”

They all looked to Mal, waiting for instructions. Several moments passed and Wash started to make a comical face and urge Mal on with his expression. Zoe merely swatted his arm and opened her mouth to speak.

Then suddenly from the back of the room Jayne spoke.

“I’ll be a liou coe shway duh biao-tze huh hoe-tze fuh ur-tze, before we play this tune again. Mal, we ain’t like to get no boon outta this, same as last time. S’right time we cut our losses before we…” Jayne searched for how to finish the sentence. “…lose ‘em.”

Everyone stared blankly at Jayne for a full three seconds, unmoving.

“Sir, I think Jayne’s right.” Zoe stood to full height as she said this, in complete seriousness.

“Did you really just say that?” Wash asked incredulously.

Zoe twisted her face up as if she smelled something rancid, and then considered his question before looking at him and plopping back down t

Comments
Sunday, 08 January 2006 06:26
I liked Book's litte pep-talk to Simon. He needs it once in a while.

It's too soon to know..." with "And too late for you..." is rather ominous. I have a thought on what's going on, but I really, really hope I'm wrong.

Now bring on the next chapter!
Sunday, 08 January 2006 08:39
I. Hate. You. This is so unfair. I cant detect your code right now..grr..to late at night.. or morning is it? :P

But I did find parts I liked!

This made me laugh out loud like in the movie when Zoe's like "What? And risk my ship?!" LOL
"Jayne complained, “If any-ruttin’-body would just listen to me-”

Zoe hefted up one side of a very large bulky machine with Mal. “Who would wanna do that, Jayne?”"

But I also liked the use of coin (great continuity from the series!) And piss monkey!! That's my favorite swear from the series ever! And the Shepard's talk of devotion to Simon, awww..so true.. pfftt.. Men. Every girl needs a Simon.. *drool* Er..where was I? :P Also..Isnt Influenze a flu HORSE'S get? wierd... Other than that.. 10!
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 08 January 2006 13:39
Hurry up with more, I want to see what happens to Kaylee, k?
~ misskitten
Sunday, 08 January 2006 14:48
I cant't think of anything better to say then I want to make pictures of every gorram scene. Well done.
Sunday, 08 January 2006 16:44
Good!! Are you channeling Stephen King's "The Stand"?!? Spooky!!
Sunday, 08 January 2006 18:53
you know somethin' bad's gonna happen now...

b
Sunday, 08 January 2006 19:18
Excellent cliffhanger with the flu im really interested to find out whats going to happen.
Sunday, 08 January 2006 22:08
yes with the liking. more. now. it's the pax. :)
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 10 January 2006 00:36
Yay! Just got back from vacation and was so excited to see your post! I loved Jayne in this. When he is the voice of reason I get worried! But he was hilarious! Oh, and cryptic River is never good! Can't wait for your next post!:):):)
Tuesday, 10 January 2006 04:45
btw thst was me above GL :)
Tuesday, 10 January 2006 05:47
You get better with each chapter, Gypsylife, Babe. This one is my fave yet. Great grasp of humor, nice voices of everybody from Jayne to Book.
Fave line: S’right time we cut our losses before we…” Jayne searched for how to finish the sentence. “…lose ‘em.”
Wednesday, 11 January 2006 22:06
This is excellent stuff! And it just keeps getting better with every chapter. I'll agree with the other poster who appreciated Book's little pep-talk to Simon.

I have no really concrete ideas on where this is going, but I'm just going to keep enjoying it as it comes...

Keep up the awesome work!
Sunday, 15 January 2006 18:46
I have to say that reading your fanfic brings me back into the verse. There are some awesome writers out there and then there are not so awesome ones. I love that I have put you in the awesome category. Please keep bringing more!! I check everyday for the next installment. Just keep that in mind.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 16 January 2006 18:39
...well...that was interesting.

...of the flu?

Seven chapters...and, at last, the plot unveils!

I'm in for a long ride...
Tuesday, 17 January 2006 06:12
All I can add to all the great comments is that you're a bloody brilliant writer ..and gimmie more.

thanks for telling me about your awesome story telling..it's made my week to have "new" Firefly to look forward to.

Lola

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