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Incubus, Prolog

Thursday, December 29, 2005

Aliester Lao is a problem

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2774    RATING: 10.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Authors note: I strongly advice reading my storie “The Test” before reading this.

Aliester sat, his legs folded. He played the old game. “She loves me, she loves me not.” Daisy was such a nice girl and he like her so much, he pulled two more “She loves me, she loves me not”. For as long as he could remember he had been told he was “gifted” smarter more talented than the other people. His mother was so proud. And his father… well his father… “She loves me, she loves me not”. The other kids called him freak and other names. His mother said they where just jealous, but Daisy she didn’t care. Daisy liked him, and he liked her. “She loves me” he was down to the last one “she love me not”. Aliester gave a little laugh to himself. Another ten-year-old boy would place faith in such things, but he was smarter, he was special. He looked at the palm of his hand. They where so pretty. Pretty like Daisy, they would make the perfect gift! Daisy sat in the long green grass she wore bright red ribbons in her hair. “Hi Daisy!” Aliester said nervously “Hi Aliester!” she smiled back. Aliester held out his near trembling fist. “Look what I did for you!” Aliester unclasped his hand with a smile. A look of horror fell across Daisy’s face. Tears began to run down her face. “Mummy! She ran away screaming. Aliesters’ heart sank. “No Daisy wait!” He looked at the spider. Its legs lay around his palm, he had pulled them off cleanly. The body was undamaged. “So pretty” Daisy just didn’t understand.

Aliester screamed as he became aware of his surrounding. He was in the chair again, the probe inserted in his forehead. He laughed to himself “What’s it to be today Doc? Another trip down memory lane?” Doctor Jones slammed her fist onto the controls. “Gorram it! He still not taking the programming!” “Same old song Doctor?” Aliester said slyly. “Shut up or I’ll gag you!” She snapped at him “you shouldn’t even be awake”. Aliester shot her a wink “Why thank you Doctor where I a year older I would have to pay handsomely for that kind of treatm

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Friday, 30 December 2005 20:00
Wow.
Saturday, 31 December 2005 17:10
So this is a more elaborate style than the Rabbit, toad and rat. Your style changed because Aliester is not psychotic. And the message still came through. I don't like labels but I have on that sticks for me. This is Waiting for Godot by Stephen King.

Do you think you can dream today, so I could get more? What's the next step? More tests or is Aliester out for good?
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 01 January 2006 13:44
There will be more from Aliester as soon as im comfortable with engaging with the character again. Right now im taking a break from him.
Wednesday, 04 January 2006 19:51
aliester is a psychotic homicidal bastard, but i like him. says a lot about me.

b

p.s. just a little nitpicking:
it's easier to read dialogue if you take a new line for each different person speaking. you also mispelled "nothing"

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