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Friday, December 2, 2005

Post-Serenity. Life goes on and drags you along, for better or worse.

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Fluffiest fluff that ever fluffed. With a tiny hint of aaaangst. Tiny.

Post-Serenity, with Spoilers .

All scathing feedback welcome. Unscathing, too.

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The lights were dimmed for the night, giving the infirmary with its multitude of reflective surfaces a calming glow. It was almost completely quiet, not counting the steady hum of the engine. Or the occasional beep from one of the monitors.

Or the very, very soft sound of Zoe breathing.

There was always a stillness to her, an economy of movement beyond such things as distracted fidgeting, but this unstirring sleep had nothing to do with control and everything with the lack of it.

It had been a close call. Bad judgment.

She was slipping away from him, away from the world, in pieces, every few weeks, just when he thought she was out of the woods she would do something and slip . She'd make him watch her die. Zoe, of all people.

She made him watch out so it wouldn't happen. He'd never had to, before, had no practice in it. So here she was, again, and here he was, again, in the middle of the night, willing her body to recover more quickly and take her mind along with it.

Sometimes he found himself wondering who he'd trade to get Wash back from the dead and he never had an answer that didn't make his heart bleed.

"Cap'n?"

It appeared he wasn't the only one awake with worry.

Kaylee's disheveled form stood in the infirmary door, sleepily blinking. Judging by the white men's undershorts that did a very bad job of matching her flowery shirt, Mal guessed she hadn't made her way to him from her own bunk. He wanted to be disturbed but, truthfully, he was too tired to muster up the effort.

"Hey."

With one hand he beckoned her closer until she walked straight into his hug.

"How is she doing?" One of Kaylee's hands, almost completely clean, reached out to pick invisible lint off Zoe's blanket. "Simon said she should have had a transfusion."

"Yeah

Comments
Friday, 02 December 2005 22:51
Absolutely fabulous and aching for a sequel. I love the way you had the three of them in a place of peace at the end, sharing their concern for Zoe and affection for each other with an ease that oft' times has been lacking as the ship and crew have lurched from one crisis to another. Hope that healing balm will extend to Zoe when she wakes. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 02 December 2005 23:35
Oh this is really, very, quite good. I agree with AMDOBELL, I hope there is a sequel. I could really get invested in this story. I like your writing style. I could do with a longer chapter too. You've really captured 'em.
Friday, 02 December 2005 23:39
Cozy fluff indeed. And the aaangst brought a tear to my eye. I hope to seem more soon. Keep up the great work.
2X2
Saturday, 03 December 2005 00:00
Ohhh, such a lovely moment there at the end... the way Inara ran her hand through Mal's hair... and the three of them together on the couch...
Very nice, and Zoe's behaviour, very very believable...
Please do more, this is worth continuing!
CUB
Saturday, 03 December 2005 00:23
You do an excellent job of creating a mood through setting and description. It ranks right up there with the best I've read in that respect.

Also, I don't usually go for post-Serenity fics (mainly because they're almost all dripping with anguish) or romantic resolution... but you sold me on both with this piece. Love the Inara-Mal bit.
Saturday, 03 December 2005 00:36
Oh that was very good. So many things to like. :)
Saturday, 03 December 2005 05:46
Suweeeeet!
And yeah, it still hurts. But if Kaylee promises it'll get better, then I suppose we just gotta believe, right?
Saturday, 03 December 2005 12:11
Awwwww, thank you all! Such lovely comments. Make me all fuzzy, hehehe.

I have to say, this is a stand-alone with no sequel. But I left them in a good place, I think. *g*
Saturday, 03 December 2005 16:38
aaw, it's just like a big warm hug...

b
Sunday, 04 December 2005 00:56
"Maybe he'd suddenly start yelling then and say something scathing and she'd finally tell him that she wished it had been him instead of Wash."

-so sad and yet probably true, at least for a minute
Tuesday, 06 December 2005 01:25
Awww, I loved it!
Very beautiful :)
Friday, 13 January 2006 06:14
there are far too many sentences that really got to me to list them all, but this one at the very beginning; "She'd make him watch her die. Zoe, of all people." really hit me. i love their relationship - that kind of blind trust and understanding that one will always be there for the other without it being said or acknowledged, it's just a fact until something happens that's bigger than those things and what that does to them and their relationship is so heartwrenching... i really thought mal's thoughts on zoe's behavior were so truthful - that disappointment and worry and hurt. and the bit about it being her turn to break... man oh man...

i loved every single interaction with the women of serenity in this - even the mention of River was perfect. i love the idea of her talking to the plastic dinosaurs... just a perfect lovely piece that reflects remarkably well where all these people are after the BDM. each relationship is so clear and beautiful - kaylee's physical warmth and trust and belief that things are and will be better, zoe's strength crumbling and mal trying so desperately to hold her together when it's always been her job... and his relationship with inara finally easing into something a little easier, a little more trusting with eachother, the skittishness finally disappearing... i'm totally rambling, but i *adored* this... awesome, awesome job...
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 28 February 2006 22:57
very nice stand alone
XKRISTINX
Sunday, 02 April 2006 18:30
Very very good.

Rings so true. . . . .

Makes me think: "Awww" - as if it were a rescued puppy sleeping on my lap. . .
Tuesday, 05 September 2006 16:30
Hmm, I hadn't read this before. I'm glad I did. This was a great emotional moment. From Mal realizing Kaylee hadn't followed him from her own bunk but from Simon's to Inara crawling under the blanket and all three of them sleeping just outside the infirmary, it was all very well done.
You've got Mal and Kaylee's relationship well done here as well as Mal and Inara's.
Tuesday, 12 December 2006 11:43
"Sometimes he found himself wondering who he'd trade to get Wash back from the dead and he never had an answer that didn't make his heart bleed."
Wow.
Nailed it.

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