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Pretty ... pretty - chapter 14 - "Jaynes hell"

Monday, November 14, 2005

Fourteenth part of my Simon/Kaylee series. More humorous bit. Focuses mostly on River, all I'm gonna say.

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AN: After I finished the last chapter I was a little at a loss on what to do next, not wanting to just focus on the pregnancy, cause even though that's really cute and all it can get boring pretty easily. So I was chatting to a friend of mine and we started brainstorming and one thing she said really stuck by me and then I had a talk with Ida, my best friend who just said a few things that got me rolling on the floor with laughter. So here we go from angst to humor.

AN2: As for the question if I have decided the babys sex, I have. I won't reveal it yet though, so you, like the characters will still be guessing ;)

*** Jaynes hell ***

Jayne made his way down the ladder to his bunk. He wasn't all that tired, but there was nothing to do. He had lifted weights for about an hour. Although he usually did two when he first started, the way River had stared at him from the other side of the bay had just freaked him out. He hated it when she did that. Just sat there and stared at a fella, not saying anything. It was downright creepy. Started around supper. He was dipping his bread into the soup, taking bit bites out of it, talking with Mal about the next job they had lined up. At first he hadn't really noticed the stare. He had thrown the doc and Kaylee a couple looks, the way the lovebirds were interacting, making googly eyes at each other, sneaking a kiss. Part of it had just made Jayne queasy. He tolerated the doc at best, but the guy made Kaylee shine brighter than ever and even though Jayne wouldn't admitt it even at gunpoint, he liked it when Kaylee smiled. There was a ton of brothers at home to keep his ma company, but the little mechanic was the closest Jayne had to a sister.

When taking his eyes from the happy couple he found River staring at him, a perfectly innocent smile on her face, but there was just something about her that creeped him out. He tried not to notice her, but the way she was staring it was downright hard not to. He excused himself from the table and headed for the cargo bay where he

Comments
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 14 November 2005 03:34
awww i love it!!! that was so adorable and funny. hooray for aunt river.
Monday, 14 November 2005 04:06
Aw!!! That was the sweetest thing!

Except for the part about Jayne. Oh, that'll be seared into MY brainpan. *shudder*.

Auntie River! How sweet!
Monday, 14 November 2005 04:48
I like this. River had been pretty much absent the entire story so far, and it's fresh to see her perspective on her brother and sister-in-law becoming parents and her becoming an aunt.

And as for Jayne, it's interesting to see how all sorts of torture could happen to him, and it's still funny.
Monday, 14 November 2005 04:57
Really great chapter. I think it is one of your best! Update update update! Please.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 14 November 2005 05:46
aw can i just say awww. how adorable. I love the simon-dad moments. I don't know about everyone else, but I'm hoping for a girl.
Monday, 14 November 2005 06:08
Gotta say, I'm rooting for a girl, too. Not sure why, a girl just seems more Simon's temperment than a boy. Can't explain it any bettert than that.

And I like the notion that River would also try pregnancy to retrieve some of her brother's affection - it certainly worked for Kaylee.

"Captain is occupied" was the perfect understated description of Mal/Inara.
Monday, 14 November 2005 06:35
Hee! Oh, Jayne...

And Simon and Kaylee...gawwww, just so cute!
Monday, 14 November 2005 16:17
my heart is now a melty little puddle...and my eyes are burned from their sockets

"Wash...covered his eyes and screamed My eyes! My eyes!"

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Tuesday, 15 November 2005 01:26
hey dont you dare make it a boy just becauses everyone wants it t be a girl... element of suprise would not be good in this case so have a ggod reason for makin it a boy if youu do plz...

great chapter make another

P.S. I wanna girl
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 01:26
hey dont you dare make it a boy just becauses everyone wants it t be a girl... element of suprise would not be good in this case so have a ggod reason for makin it a boy if youu do plz...

great chapter make another

P.S. I wanna girl
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 03:50
Bah..I keep getting to these so LATE! Gorram school...

But I love the River choosing Jayne and her explanation LOL, and then another AWWW when Simon calls himself Dad..aww
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 07:34
You are so awesome! I just finished reading Chapters 1-14 and I am now eagerly waiting for the MANY more chapters that will hopefully come swiftly! I've been trying on all of the different 'ships and you are winning me over to the Simon/Kaylee side by a landslide! I loved the Wash line after he saw Jayne's ass! MY EYES!! hehe Keep up the good work!
Tuesday, 15 November 2005 07:36
Also pulling for a girl! This is going to sound crazy but this story makes me want to get pregnant! Or maybe thats just me! My husband will know who to blame! :)
ANONYMOUS
Wednesday, 16 November 2005 09:44
HAAHAHAHAHAHAHaa! awwwww! you've put me on this emotional rollercoaster reading all ch 1-15 in less than a week. Keep up the great writing!

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