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Destined Chapter 1

Tuesday, October 18, 2005

River and Jayne start getting close. Sucky summary. Come up with a better one let me know.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2073    RATING: 8.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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TITLE: Destined

AUTHOR: Inquisitive One

EMAIL: inquisitive1swork@hotmail.com

RATING: PG13-R

DISCLAIMER: The only characters that are mine are the ones that have no connection to a show. Which aren't many characters in this story.

DISTRIBUTION: My site http://inquisitive1swork.bravehost.com, Fanfiction.net, Yahoogroups: inquisitive1supdates and some others.

SUMMARY: Firefly Jayne/River. River and Jayne start getting close. Lame Summary... figure out a good one let me know.

NOTES: *FLASHBACK* < DREAM >

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CHAPTER 1

PLANET

"Hmm hm hum." River Tam hums as she walks down the dark street her mind humming over all she feels and hears around her and inside. She stops in her tracks when she feels icy fingers trail down her spine. She turns to find two men watching her causing her senses to go on overload. "Bad men. Screaming. Blood." She mutters shaking her head vigorously. "No thoughts jumbled. Mine... there's... every ones."

"Oh looky we have ourselves a crazy."

River shakes her head, "Not crazy... jumbled." She stops walking when one of the men stops in front of her. "Screams... echoes." She mutters her hands going to her head. "Simon more needles. Go see Jayne... thoughts quiet." She moves to walk around the man when the other stops her by grabbing her arm. "No touching... touching bad. Pain... fear"

"She may be crazy but she would still be fun." One chuckles.

"Pain" River says panicked.

Inside the bar, Simon Tam looks up from his conversation with Kaylee Frye puzzled to find his sister absent.

"I'm sure she's shiny Simon." Kaylee assures seeing the worry in the doctor's eyes.

"Yeah you told her not to go far." Wash the pilot points out.

"See seems lucid enough today Simon." Inara adds

Simon nods knowing the companion is correct. "Even so I should go check on her. Make sure she hasn't wandered off again."

"She always does." Jayne Cobb complains "Don't know why ya bother bringin your crazy sister out... we always end up lookin for her."

Malcolm Reynolds

Comments
Wednesday, 19 October 2005 00:12
pretty good
Wednesday, 19 October 2005 18:42
i likes!!! river/jayne stuff's always good
ANONYMOUS
Thursday, 20 October 2005 00:23
yeah its good, keep going please. i will give you a hat if you do... a really big one.
CUB
Friday, 21 October 2005 02:53
Not a fan of the present tense. Solid characterizations, though.
INQUISITIVE1
Friday, 21 October 2005 04:11
Well Cub I'd write past tense if I could... but never really been able too. Not sure why though. Just wanted that out otherwise it would have bugged me forever.
Monday, 31 October 2005 08:28
yay, shiny work m8, very well done, river is slightly constricted, vocabulary wise and abit childish overall but you got the crazytalk thing down well, not many people on the site can get it right.
nice work

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