Blue Sun Room FICTION - SUSPENSE
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Thursday, 28 April 2005 05:06
EEE! Jebbypal, that was teh hawt shit! Omg, I need another chapter, like now! So many things I loved, Mal's conflict at the end, the conversation with Jayne being annoyed at not having an answer...Zoe's dream, this story is developing so well--you should never doubt that. *cheers*
The scene in the infirmary was too funny, Kaylee playing mediator. Poor thing. You write the crew's interactions with such flair and ease, I admire you for it. (Is envious) And is it me, or does your Mal get better each time? *sigh*
Shiny work, and I promise to be quick about the beta next time. :head down in shame:
The scene in the infirmary was too funny, Kaylee playing mediator. Poor thing. You write the crew's interactions with such flair and ease, I admire you for it. (Is envious) And is it me, or does your Mal get better each time? *sigh*
Shiny work, and I promise to be quick about the beta next time. :head down in shame:
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Thursday, 28 April 2005 09:58
it was really good work. i like the other 5 chapters as well by the way. but you really seemed to have taken off with the story in this one. very nice. Keep it up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
no power in the verse
xoxox-fredikayllow-xoxox
no power in the verse
xoxox-fredikayllow-xoxox
Thursday, 28 April 2005 17:33
Excellent! I am so relived that Wash is back on Serenity and really love how he fitted the other ship with a beacon so that Serenity would be able to track her (once he finds the frequency). It was also nice to see Kaylee worrying about Wash and being wary of Simon's anger and irrationality because of the absence of River. Mal calming down then thinking things through with Wash then Jayne was very in keeping as was the Shepherd being cool and reasonable. It feels like forever waiting for new chapters so please keep up the good work - but faster, *dong ma*? Shiny stuff, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 20 May 2005 07:00
Hmmm... The rabbit hole indeed. Well written. I'm still looking for Zoe's reason for betrayal. Jayne had an excellent point, though. Why didn't River see through Zoe the first time they met? Expired aspirin, hehe. Like I've told others, writing the quality takes time, especially when you're trying to give all nine their lines.
So, take your time and...
Keep flyin'
So, take your time and...
Keep flyin'
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