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Mal and Inara's Day Off - Part 3

Friday, April 22, 2005

Mal and Inara begin to learn more about each other's past.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2598    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Chapter 3 – “Bright copper kettles”

Finally leaving the store, the Captain and Companion continued their walk past the seemingly never-ending stretch of shops. Since their conversation inside the store, Inara and Mal were now more relaxed in each others presence.

Passing by a rather ill taken care of store, Inara paused grimacing, as Mal squashed his face against the window, ignoring its dirt, to try and determine what was inside.

Laughing lightly, Inara, put her hand on his shoulder. “You know, you could always do something different, and actually go inside.”

Moving back from the window and turning to look at her, Mal squinted slightly from the light of the sun which was now shining almost directly into his eyes. “Go inside? Nah, I was just looking.”

“Hell, I don’t mind. It’s not like I haven’t done this before what with Kaylee and Zoe on the ship. Okay I take that back. I don’t remember ever seeing Zoe in a dress…” Realizing he was getting slightly off subject, he quickly assured her “I’ll even wait for you”

Inara purses her lips, why did everything with this man prove to be so difficult? Sighing she spoke, “Mal it’s obvious that you want to have a look. Let’s go inside. Really, I don’t mind.”

Off his skeptical look, she continued “Really. I’ll even wait.” she smiled as she repeated his earlier words.

The corners of Mal’s mouth began to turn upwards, against his will. Scratching his head he voiced his concerns. “Yeah, but I got to see you dress up all pretty-like. Doesn’t seem fair…” He trailed off.

Inara tilted her head slightly, considering his response. “Well okay then. If the only reason you won’t go in is because of my feeling uncomfortable or bored, then…” She glanced around looking for inspiration.

The corners of Inara’s lips, turned upwards into a smile as an idea struck her. Gesturing to a sign in the store window, she said “I think, I may have found our solution”

“Target practis

Comments
Friday, 22 April 2005 16:40
The lunch scene depends on how you want to write it - what they will eat even how and where they will satisfy that particular hunger before admitting perhaps to a more fundamental one that has been ignored too long. You just amalgamate the lunch idea into the next part rather than spin it out into a chapter on its own. Whatever, I am really enjoying this very much. Shiny! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 24 April 2005 05:34
I have really enjoyed this story, and I think that however you choose to go will be fine. But I do like the lunch idea. Mal and Inara have taken a step in Part 3 that they might never have taken. So they find a cozy little restaurant and over whatever meal they have, the opening up to each other continues. It could be very shiny. But you are the author and that's what matters. I will read and enjoy whatever you write!
Sunday, 24 April 2005 11:24
Thanks for the reviews!! They were so shiny!
I love you guys so much :)
BELLONA
Saturday, 03 September 2005 20:58
ooh, shiny!!!

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