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Vengeance: Ch. 4 - Confessions

Monday, April 4, 2005

On Persephone, Soul finds more than he bargained for. Togan makes a confession, Wash loses his faith, and Kaylee finds herself in more trouble than she ever thought possible...

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Persephone

The Eavesdown Docks was a world apart from the big cities on Persephone. Instead of the spiraling towers, standing erect and straining for the sky, you had piles of trash and stacks of cargo containers, each serving as unintentional walls, corralling in the riffraff that passed through the docks, either searching for passage or in attempt to sell their wares to those making the brief stop before continuing on the greener pastures, or at least pastures not quite as dusty. You could spend a lifetime walking through the grime-covered streets and not see everything there was to see. When the ships came in, the scenery changed, as well as the stands interspaced throughout the area. One day you could visit a stand and buy exotic dresses from the outer rim worlds, and the next day from that same stand you could indulge in something that, while it resembled some sort of steak, it would probably be better if you didn’t eat it. Most likely, you would notice that the population of stray dogs had diminished somewhat and come to the correct conclusion as to just what was being cooked. That was life at the Eavesdown Docks.

From his vantage point between two precariously balanced cargo bins atop one of the many trash piles, Soul gazed out across the circus of people, not really sure what he was looking for. He had been resting when a swath of a voice floated through his head and jarred him from his sleep. He had gone for his gun, of course, but quickly realized that he was still alone, and that the cargo bin in which he had taken refuge was still silent. With the door shut, all the outside noise was reduced to a dull roar, and it was impossible to make out different voices. The only light came from two transparent panels in the ceiling. He had focused for a few minutes, trying to pick out the voice, but all he heard was the constant roar. So now he stood just in th

Comments
Monday, 04 April 2005 20:17
Oh good gorram, poor Kaylee! Hurry River, time to bring the cavalry in fast and hard. Talos needs sorting out and that bit with Early in it was downright creepifying. Very good myth, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 04 April 2005 20:37
It's not nice to leave me in such suspense!!!! I have so many unanswered questions!!!! Is Kaylee going to be okay? What the heck is Early going to do? Can River save the day? Well someone give Talos a well deserved kick in the ass?

*takes a deep breath, calms down*

This chapter is another wonderful peice in your story. I can't wait to read the next. Great job, SOS!
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 05 April 2005 12:04
Awesome man... I think I see where you're going with Soul.

Keep up the shiny work.

-Ski
Tuesday, 05 April 2005 15:16
*Sharp intake of breath!*

AARGH! NO! CLIFFHANGER ENDING!

*Slowly exhails*

Okay, I'm good now... (I think..) Wow... I'm not sure where to start. That was strong stuff.. VERY good, strong stuff!

I loved the moments between River and Wash and Book and Togan. They were both nicely written and I could imagine them vividly in my mind. I especially loved the part where River tries to restore Wash's faith by giving him Mal's cross.

The 'sharpshooter' moment at the beginning was well written. Jubal Early's appearance was creepyfying too!

Also, Poor Kaylee!!! I agree w/ AmDoBell. The calvary need to arrive ASAP! Talos is completely off his axle!!

Keep up the Supershiny work SOS! I'm loving this and can't wait to read the next installment!

- Cos.
Wednesday, 06 April 2005 04:11
Shiny!
I like the way you disposed of the blue hands and bringing Early into the story as an expendable is uber cool!
Thursday, 07 April 2005 08:24
very good, very intriguing and poor Kaylee. i feel so sorry for her.

no power in the verse
xoxox-fredikayllow-xoxox
Friday, 08 April 2005 18:48
“She was a damn good mechanic, Book,” Togan said.
Book shook his head. “Is,” he said.
“What?”
“She is a good mechanic. Not was.”

Damn STRAIGHT! Nicely done!

I'll write faster if you will!
Sunday, 19 June 2005 09:26
Take it to heart that your writing is improving sir.

Nicely done,

Keep flyin'

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