Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

From the Inside: 2

Wednesday, February 9, 2005

Zoe's dying and Mal has to figure out how to make that not so without using his gun.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2446    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The man was still smiling. He knew that as long as Zoë was lying on the floor, her body yanking itself about as it was, he had the upper hand. He knew that, even with the smell of gun oil from Mal’s pistol in his nostrils, he was safe. Mal knew it, too, and it made him even angrier that he couldn’t make this mei ta ma de hun dan die a slow and painful death. Mal also knew that each second that ticked away took a little more of Zoë’s life with it. He uncocked his gun.

“What do you want?” he asked the man, death dripping from every word.

The man took a step back from Mal, smoothed his robes and shook to straighten himself out. “There’s no need to get so very upset, dear Captain. There is a solution to your little crisis.” The man walked to his desk and sat on the edge. “It just so happens that the poison your friend there has ingested is very rare, very rare indeed. Had she been anywhere else when she fell ill, she would have had no chance at all.” The man’s voice rolled along and Mal had the certain and disgusting feeling that he had said these very words before on more than one occasion. Why was he saying all of this? He was taking time, too much of Zoë’s time.

“However,” the man continued with a flourish, “it is also the case that I happen to have, on hand, the antidote to that very same rare poison. So, the position we are in is quite marvelous…”

The man’s speech stopped as Mal delivered a punch that spun his head around. His body twisted and toppled to the floor. He grabbed his jaw in pain and his eyes were wide in shock. “I don’t have the time to listen to you stroke yourself all day. This is not one of your fanciful books where everything’s roundabout and mysterious. This is real and if you don’t give her the antidote right now, I will take you apart piece by piece until I get i

Comments
Wednesday, 09 February 2005 21:58
Glad to see Zoe isn't gonna die. As for Terra...interesting. She obviously has no problem killing people. Lets hope she doesn't try anything with the wonderful crew of Serenity. But if she does, I'm sure Mal can kick her ass. =o)
Wednesday, 09 February 2005 23:10
Excellent! Loved that *liumang wangba dan* getting his come uppance from the girl he had tormented and used as a slave for nine years. Has a kind of poetry to it. Can't wait to see what happens next. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
MAR
Thursday, 10 February 2005 00:49
Like it so far.
XDD
The bad guy of the mansion (I don't remember his nme right now XD) made me think of a 50's Hammer productions villain so in my mind he looked like a mix between Bela Lugosi and Christopher Lee.
I like the way you write, by the way, it makes the reading smooth and entertaining.

A little criticism is that Terra seems to be too perfect. Too cool, too smart, too centered (a little psico too, but that's not bad)... dunno, yet I really want to see what's to come next.
Thursday, 10 February 2005 18:02
Well this is certainly going in a direction removed from where I thought it was... feel free to keep me guessing :-)
Thursday, 10 February 2005 19:17
Your take on Zoe in this series is excellent! I have one little teeny tiny critique: Remember in ARIEL when Simon gives values in credits and in platinum? The "common immune booster" was "20 credits, maybe 50 platinum" so raw platinum can be valued from that at 2.5 platinum units to a credit.

I'm picking nits, I know, but I like this enough to want to put in what I hope you'll see as constructive critique. No offense meant!
Thursday, 10 February 2005 20:28
oldfan45~

Trust me, there is no offense taken. I was having a lot of trouble figuring out relative values for things. Part of my difficulty is there isn't a named currency (i.e. dollars, pounds, euros, etc.) The closest I've got is credits. So, thank you immensely for giving me a star to sail my fanfic by.
Thursday, 10 February 2005 20:37
Terra is one intriguing girl. She certainly got her revenge, and rightly so. I'm interested to see what happens next, and just what kind of trouble Terra gets Serenity and her crew in. More!

- Soul
Tuesday, 23 May 2006 19:19
I found myself reading faster just so I could see what was going to happen next. I really enjoyed this. Can't wait to read more of your stuff.

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