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The Hot Place (teaser)

Wednesday, June 15, 2011

This one's in script format. Our Big Damn Heroes are in trouble again - Mal, Zoe, Jayne and Kaylee end up stranded on Ezra, with Kaylee hurt, and the others have NO idea where they are. During a battle to seize Niska’s skyplex, their shuttle is caught by a stray shot; the passenger they’d arranged to pick up neglected to mention a) the battle or b) that he was on the skyplex, the inconsiderate bunger. This takes place 3 weeks after “Unlikely Bedfellows”.

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OPEN TO BLANK SCREEN


CAPTION READS:


PRIVATE VESSEL MERRIWEATHER , MAYFLOWER-CLASS
EN ROUTE TO EZRA, ETA TWENTY MINUTES
THIRTY YEARS AGO

Girl’s voice : Read.

FADE UP TO: GIRL’S BUNK ABOARD THE MERRIWEATHER ; the bunk is clearly similar to those aboard Serenity , but the Merriweather is a much larger and better-equipped vessel than an Aught-Three Firefly, custom-built to carry colonists.

Considering this is a little girl’s bunk, there’s a surprising lack of pink - the predominant colours are red and green in various shades. She’s lying in bed, a soft toy by her side, listening to an Encyclopaedia reciting the history of Ezra. She’s blonde, very pretty, has a strongly-boned face and is about seven years old.

Encyclopaedia : Ezra - one of the first outer worlds to which the science of terraforming was applied. Access reference ‘Terraforming’?

Girl : No, I know what that is. Continue.

Encyclopaedia : It was envisaged that the planet would develop a liveable but hot environment, owing to its proximity to its primary, and that the cost of settlement would be recouped in short order by mining its mountains for the enormous mineral wealth detected there by the probes which first discovered it. However, the processes involved in terraforming were, at that time, not fully understood. It is still unclear as to precisely what errors were committed in the case of Ezra, but the result was that violent and unstable weather patterns were created in the newly engineered atmosphere; these manifested primarily as extremely destructive cyclone systems which formed spontaneously. Access reference ‘Cyclone’?

Girl (tiredly) : No. Continue.

Encyclopaedia : One of these, which became known simply as ‘the Storm’, persists to this day, for reasons still not understood, and shows no signs of dissipating. It is speculated that the forces which drive the Storm are similar, though opposite, t

Comments
Wednesday, 15 June 2011 15:16
I'm giving up trying to write fics in sequence, i.e. chapter/Act I, chapter/Act II, etc. I just can't.
This script has been written partly in reverse; I have more of Act IV than Act I, in which, at the end of the episode, Jayne gets to show off unexpected cooking skills (writing this bit was so much fun it should be illegal!).

Writing the script has given me yet another idea for another one; the Councillor, her family and Niska will make one more appearance. I can't say more than that at this point...because the idea is all I have at the moment! :)


Friday, 17 June 2011 17:07
Have to say I am not so keen on stories written in script format as for giving up writing stories in sequence, why? While you may find it a pain that is nothing to how frustrating it is trying to follow the sequence of events in stories when they are not in order. A solution might be to write your stories first, then put them in order and post them that way. It would be a kindness to the reader as well. Good luck with whatever you decided. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"
Saturday, 18 June 2011 12:35
No, no, I think you've misunderstood - it's the writing in sequence, i.e. start at the beginning of the story, proceed through it and progress to the end - that I have trouble with! I'd never post a story out of sequence, that WOULD be unkind!

The reason I'm writing this one - and several others I have in mind - in script format is so I can fill in with prose later, if I decide to. It seems to be easier. I'll include as much stage direction as I can to clarify things. :)
Saturday, 18 June 2011 19:16
Thank you for explaining, feel much happier now! LOL. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"

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