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Indigo - Part I

Thursday, August 26, 2010

Maya. Post-BDM. At last, the long-awaited next story. Serenity visits Wayborn Skyplex, but there are dangers in some very unexpected places.

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“Okay.” Mal clapped his hands together, getting everyone’s attention. Well, nearly everyone. The children were gathered together, still discussing what they were going to do. Mal coughed. Twice.

“Sorry, Mal,” Hank said, laughing. “A visit to Wayborn’s far more interesting than listening to you.”

The rest of the crew, gathered as they were in the cargo bay ready to disembark at the Skyplex, appeared to concur.

“Fine,” Mal said. “Only it means they ain’t going.”

There was sudden silence as every person under four feet tall stared at him.

“Uncle Mal?” Ben asked.

“Daddy?” Ethan put in.

“He doesn’t mean it,” Bethie said, then glanced up at her mother.

“Cap’n, don’t tease,” Kaylee said, feeling her daughter’s hand creep into hers. “You know you ain’t gonna stop ‘em going to that new playing level.”

“Maybe I will, and maybe I won’t. ‘Less they listen to what I’ve got to say, we won’t know for sure.”

“We’re listening, Daddy,” Ethan said, hitching his thumbs in his own tiny suspenders.

As always Mal felt a swell of pride fill his chest, not only at being Daddy in the first place, but seeing the miniature version of himself standing there in front of him. It was like looking in a mirror that showed the long ago past.

Freya chuckled lightly, and he knew he’d been caught out. Tossing her the look that said you shouldn’t be peeking , he continued with what he had planned to say.

“We’ve got but a day here, and chores to be done first before anyone plays. And I mean anyone.” He glared at the kids, but they just grinned back. “I know there’s replacement shoes and the like to get, so just bear that in mind. And no running off. Jayne, River, don’t spend what you don’t have to on ammo. I know we’ve got some cash ready for a rainy day, but I don’t want to hear the thunder rollin’ quite yet. And that means no Protolluvial rounds.” River pouted but he ignored it. “Zoe, you’re helping Kaylee with those couple of parts we need – although why we need ‘em is a mystery

Comments
Thursday, 26 August 2010 12:53
Glad to see more from you and wow what a story line! I can only imagine where mind programming at this level is going to lead the children. Glad it got caught in time. Looking forward to more!
Thursday, 26 August 2010 14:01
Ohhhh! Goosebumps just rippled up my arms and down my back! Well written! So glad to see your back to posting! I missed your writing! Can I use any more exclamation points?? LOL
Thursday, 26 August 2010 14:05
WOW! Got to say nice welcome back. This is great. Saw where you were going when they headed in the gaming area, but the way it was written just sucked me in. Also liked the sexual banter between Mal and Frey... 'laps' was very funny indeed.
Thursday, 26 August 2010 14:34
"A simple job." *roll eyes* WHY does someone always say that? Tempting fate is what it is.
Thursday, 26 August 2010 17:23
Clarification: good story.

But yeah, it is not a simple job. It will never BE a simple job, because the universe (us!) laughs at their suffering.
Friday, 27 August 2010 14:41
I've been a lurker on this site for a good few years getting my verse fix, but I felt compelled to create an account so I could post a comment here.

Jane, your writing is beyond incredible. I used to avoid the OC stories, and the longer fics, but then I stumbled into the beginning of Masks, and was just riveted.

Over several months, I tore through every fic you have posted here, and I can only say, Wow, and a half. You have provided me with countless hours of entertainment.

Do you write professionally? If you don't you should consider it. I am an avid reader of fantasy and sci/fi and your abilities at characterization, background, foreshadowing.....you have serious talent, is I guess mainly what I'm trying to say.

Thanks for sharing your art with all of us.

Friday, 27 August 2010 18:15
Great chapter so glad you updated.
Friday, 27 August 2010 18:17
BlueHandedMenace

Is saying what everyone feels about your work.Its truly wonderful Jayne.
Monday, 30 August 2010 18:51
Woah. Straight in with the drama! Love it!
Wednesday, 01 September 2010 17:39
Crap, I really hate it when danger threatens the children. Hope our BDHs gets to them before anything bad happens. Ali D :~)
"You can't take the sky from me!"

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