Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Sensory Input

Sunday, March 7, 2010

Disclaimer: They’re not mine, because if they were, we’d all still be watching them on TV!
Rating: PG
Summary: A little foray into descriptive language for Mal/Inara junkies.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3201    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Mal’s POV:

She comes to him in the night watches, the soft swish of her skirts tickling his ears and making the tiny hairs on the back of his neck stand at attention. Not just the hairs neither, he thinks, shifting in the pilot’s seat with the sudden heaviness in his nether regions. She is light on her feet, and were it not for the silk she wears, she would come upon him in complete silence.

Not that she could ever completely catch him unawares, he knows, at least not as long as that scent hovers in the air around her, the slightest breeze filled with something she told him once was night-blooming jasmine, whatever that was. Sounds strangely erotic for a flower, he decides, but it matches her all the same. Erotic, exotic, and altogether too heady a mix to think on rationally, to his way of thinking.

Her skirts brush against the leg of his trousers as she comes to his side. He suppresses a small tremor. Her small hand lights almost casually on his shoulder, and fire spreads slowly through the rough fabric of his shirt. He clears his throat. “What brings you to the bridge this fine evenin’, ‘Nara?” he says tonight, just as he has said every night for awhile now.

“The view,” she says, in standard answer.

“Is fine, at that,” he replies, looking out into the Black to postpone the moment he knows will come, the moment when he will be unable to tear his eyes away from her.

She sighs a soft, feminine kind of exhalation, barely stirring the air as she lifts her skirts slightly and perches on the arm of his chair. “Peaceful,” she replies as she slides her hand along the hard knot of his shoulders and curls her hand lightly around his neck.

He eases into the feel of her thighs resting so close to his own, her weight slight and yet impossible to ignore as she shifts minutely, sending jolts of pleasure into places that, until recently, have gone unpleasured for far too long to be easily admitted.

They sit, quiet for a long moment, poised on the edge of the precipice, close enough to feel the

Comments
Sunday, 07 March 2010 23:36
I really enjoyed this because - Yes, I'm PROUD to be a Mal/Inara junkie.

One day someone will tell me where the 'night-blooming jasmine' thing came from. Is it canon? ... :)
Sunday, 07 March 2010 23:54
Iunno. I use it too, mostly 'cause jasmine smells pretty and is kind of sort of Arabic in origin. Even before the Disney movie.

But another possibility is incense, which has a narrower range of people who like the smell of it. Jasmine is more of a general pleaser.
Monday, 08 March 2010 00:06
Oh, RIGHT. The STORY.

*fans self*
Monday, 08 March 2010 00:58
*in the "that's hawt" way*
2X2
Monday, 08 March 2010 12:21
I too would like to know where the night blooming jasmine thing comes from (because it drives me nuts, grr)

Other than that, I quite enjoyed this though! Very sensual! I like all your contrasting descriptions, cold air to the fire between them, soft curves and hard angles, very nice!
Monday, 08 March 2010 18:59
Mirrored images, opposites, opposing viewpoints, same but different, ying and yang...that's why this pairing has timeless appeal and attraction, hence the "junkies"

Nice job writing them as described.
Monday, 08 March 2010 21:59
as much as i hate to admit it, sometimes a little bit of happy mal/inara is better than brooding angst. was a delight to read...even if there was kissing.
Tuesday, 09 March 2010 02:18
mmmm, nice. Lots of very vivid sense details, but the striking thing for me is how you reveal how each of them is vulnerable to each other, to a degree that might surprise the other. It makes the "hawt" also touching and human.

Well done!
Friday, 12 March 2010 05:49
ditto mincingbeast. Kissy is often poorly done--thank you for being the opposite.

That said, your detail is delightful--not least the actual physical sensations and little things both of them notice. It's done very smoothly, without going over the top (for something titled "sensory imput", hee) and doesn't trip on it's own description.

What amazed me most was the way you captured space and that "sixth sense" between them. The "angles" between them, the way they were describing each other, internally and externally.
I liked it.
Bravo!

jasmine: I don't know about canon, but it's been a popular perfume for literally thousands of years. It's revered around the world where it grows for the scented flowers that open in the evening. Jasmine would not be out of place for her.
Wednesday, 17 March 2010 21:42
Beautiful.
Wednesday, 17 March 2010 21:42
Looking at your rating I cannot believe anyone would give this a 9. I'm giving you an honorary 10.

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