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Maggie's Ship : Chapter 25

Sunday, September 26, 2004

The end...........

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Chapter 25

Dinner was a sad affair, Maggie and Jayne stayed in their rooms, so no one had cooked anything. Book put something together, he wondered what was going on, as usual no one had told him anything. No one talked much at dinner, even River was quite.

Mal found himself at Maggie and Jayne’s door, ready to compromise and let them stay. He knocked and Jayne answered, they had been packing “You two don’t waist much time.” He walked in and sat down.

“What do you want Mal, you won, Jayne and I are leaving.” Maggie finished with the box she was working on “Not sure what we’re going to do with our half of Serenity, Jayne thinks we should sell it to Badger.” Jayne smiled at the look of horror on Mal’s face.

“Sell it to Badger, funny Jayne. He’d have Simon and River in the Fed’s hands before you could cash the check, even you aren’t that stupid.” Mal snarled to Jayne, not quite sure if he was kidding or not.

“Yeah, that’s what Maggie said.” Jayne laughed, picking up another box and put it on the pile “You got another box Baby? This one full.” He moved around Mal like he wasn’t even there.

“I want to talk to the two of you, seem I spoke a little hastily early. You kinda blind sided me, you two can stay on board.” Mal got up to leave, assuming everything was now OK.

“What happened Mal, you find out about Zoë and now you need Jayne?” Maggie stared at Mal, more then a little upset with him.

“What about Zoë?” He tried to bluff.

“Nice try, Mal. Only reason you want us to stay is that Zoë is pregnant too.”

“Fine, does it matter why, I’m willing to let you stay. Isn’t that what you want?”

“I would of liked it if you would of welcomed the news and had said congratulations, not get off my ship. It’s to late Mal, we’re leaving.” Maggie walked to the door and opened it, waiting for him to leave.

After Mal left and Maggie closed the door Jayne looked at her puzzled like “How did you know about Zoë?”

“I found out back on Grays, they picked up some baby stuff there.”

“You sure you want to go, he sa

Comments
Sunday, 26 September 2004 03:42
*shocked expression* And he throws in another twist at the end that just screams "sequel!" The thing I must appluad most overall is your sensible decisions when you characters reach forks in the road. (hope that made sense) Surely do hope you'll write another one like this!
Sunday, 26 September 2004 03:48
She. Mea culpa.
ANONYMOUS
Monday, 27 September 2004 13:15
I liked the fact that someone realized how Jayne was being treated and actually cared. I would love to see a sequel to this. . .but I would also like to see the crew together again one day. Good work!

-Canton
Monday, 27 September 2004 17:44
Couldn't keep up with the story while you were posting it...

Good plotting, good Jayne-ness. When Maggie ended up owning half of Mal's ship that was creepifying. When *Jayne* ended up owning half, that was downright horrifying! Poor Mal. ;-)

Ah, Jayne... just needed the love of a good woman.
Friday, 15 October 2004 17:11
Great story, read it all in one sitting.
Please write more though something where Mal doesn't seem too much like the bad guy.
ANONYMOUS
Sunday, 18 December 2005 00:03
Best OCF story arc I have ever read.
ANONYMOUS
Tuesday, 07 February 2006 03:40
omg!!! YOU CAN NOT JUST LEAVE IT THERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!*calms down* no wait GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
i give you a 10 for origonality
7 for the english/grammer stuff
and a 1 for leaving it like that
10
7
1
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17/3= 6

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