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Prospero's Legacy - Part II

Saturday, August 23, 2008

Maya. Post-BDM. Mal leaves the children with Inara, and Sam has some very specific instructions from Simon. NEW CHAPTER

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“Of course they can stay.” Inara looked towards the children frolicking in the orchard with all of the dogs. “You don’t even need to ask. This is as much their home as mine.”

Serenity had touched down the night before, too late for anything other than a hurried hello and a promise to meet for breakfast. Now that everyone was full to almost bursting point from Ms Boden’s magical touch, Mal had taken Inara for a walk to talk about the real reason for their visit.

“Sure Sam won’t object?” Mal asked, thumbs wedged firmly in his pants pockets.

“Why should he?”

“I don’t know. Having his space invaded by a load of folks under four feet tall.”

Inara smiled. “You obviously don’t know him as well as you think you do.”

“But you do?”

She led him to the ornate cast-iron chair. “Mal, we’ve talked about having children, and this will be good practice for him.”

He sat down slowly. “Put him off the idea, you mean.”

“No. In fact entirely the opposite.”

He stared at her, glad his buttocks were already on the cold metal. “’Nara, you saying you’re … pregnant?”

She shook her head. “Not yet.” Smoothing her dress automatically, she added, “But I want a child. With Sam.”

“It’s that serious?”

“I love him.”

“Like you loved me?” The instant he said it he wished he hadn’t, but she merely folded her hands in her lap and gazed at him.

“No. It’s quite different. You were a flame I was drawn to like a moth, so close I was singeing my wings. Sam is the banked coals, all heat and passion beneath the surface.”

He wondered briefly at the flash of jealousy that shot through him, but realised it was probably always going to be that way. He had loved her, and he had to admit he’d felt something of the same when Kaylee fell for the doctor, and Zoe for the pilot. Not with River, though, although that was probably something to do with knowing that she looked on him as her father. So a touch of jealousy was to be expected, if not approved of. He said quickly, “So he’s the one got c

Comments
Saturday, 23 August 2008 11:28
Holy moly! Wonderful pacing and the built up at the end of this chapter is like the dum-dum-dum music they used for the oncoming shark in "Jaws" and it's got my heart speeding up along with it. I absolutely loved Kaylee in this one, she really shines and reminds us all of just why we love her so much. But oh, those medical supplies Simon gave Sam bring it all on home in a hard uncompromising way that there will not be fun times ahead, not for any of them. Another brilliant chapter, Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 23 August 2008 11:29
Um, that should have been build up not built up, sorry. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 23 August 2008 12:11
Quite a chapter you wrote here. Wow. Pure genius using Cervantes since we already know how literate Mal really is. It also describes this nearly hopeless quest perfectly. The summary of the M/I dynamic as moths to a flame really got me, as well as the pang of jealousy he felt when he realized that he had loved Inara. Great job on that. No matter how much we grow as people, we still are hardwired for the base emotions.

The shelter and the precautions sounds like we're settling in for a war. Glad Inara has Sam - she's going to need him. The drugs gave a great clue as to the gravity of the danger, as well as Simon's thoroughness as a father and a doctor - nice touch. He didn't even have to be there for you to feel his love and concern for everyone there.

Nice diplomacy by wrench with Mal and Kaylee too. Not going to touch how you broke my heart with the goodbye scene with the kids. Not going there - still have the tears.

The very last line of the fic was very interesting - and says a lot about tough love and the price of survival on a frontier and all kinds of volumes about the meaning of life and what we hold dear to our hearts. This was a fabulous piece of writing, Jane, looking forward to more.
Saturday, 23 August 2008 14:20
Well, what more can I say that what has already been said. You have outdone yourself with this chapter. It deserves soooo much more than a ten, just because of the last scene with Simon, Sam, and Inara. I also loved Kaylee in this one. She shown like the star she is. Great work!
Saturday, 23 August 2008 15:15
Can I give you a 20? And I can't say any more either except that your writing and story telling just gets better and better.
BLKHERO69
Saturday, 23 August 2008 16:33
Magnificient. Brought a tear to the eye & a hankerin' for more. Joss would be proud...
Sunday, 24 August 2008 13:04
Truly breathtaking work here, Jane. You've outdone yourself!

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