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One good day - Chapter 1

Tuesday, May 13, 2008

Mal takes Zoe and Jayne out in Persephone to hunt down the job they haven’t had in ages. In an attempt to bring in some money in the meanwhile, the crew goes looking for a new passenger.

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One good day

By Charlotte Summers

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Setting : Takes place post-Firefly, pre-Serenity, meaning: it’s just another adventure with all of the crew except for Inara and Shepherd Book, who have just left Serenity.

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Chapter one

‘Money’

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“Think they’re having sex?”

Kaylee and Jayne were standing outside the so rarely closed doors to the bridge, listening in on Wash and Zoe, who were inside. Only muffled noises sounded from the apparently pretty soundproof doors. In reply to Jayne’s remark, Kaylee rolled her eyes, indignant on behalf of the two inside, and slapped the big guy on the arm.

“What!?” he asked.

“You can’t just say that.” Kaylee paused for a moment. “No way they’re having sex. I mean, I can’t exactly figure out what they’re saying – but that don’t sound like sex. If that’s how sex sounds, then I think I ain’t doin’ it right. They’s having a fight,” she finished half-sad.

Jayne looked at her, suddenly slightly uncomfortable. “Well, then… how do you have sex?”

Kaylee looked at him with a mix of disbelief and interest, and then nearly jumped a foot in the air when Mal suddenly sneaked up behind them.

“We’re not eavesdropping, are we?”

“No, we was just-”

“Yes,” Jayne said at the same time Kaylee started making up an excuse.

Mal jerked his head to the place he came from, gesturing them to leave. “Go. Skedaddle.”

Kaylee, slightly embarrassed, was already on her way though Jayne was a little more hesitant to leave – when the doors to the bridge swung open and revealed the tall, overpowering form of a very pissed of looking Zoe. Jayne immediately stumbled a pace backwards, off the stairs, and Mal, in an attempt not to appear like he was eavesdropping, raised his hand and stuttered something along the way of ‘Hi, Zoe’. She, however, didn’t even glance at any of them, but merely stormed past them and headed straight for the stairs next to the dining area.

Ignoring the other two, Mal went up the stairs and onto the bridge, behi

Comments
Tuesday, 13 May 2008 15:28
You have peak my interests with Bela. Very nice start.
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 09:32
can't put my finger on exactly how this fic works for me but - i gave it a casual glance and was hooked!:) maybe it just flows real smooth... it just does everything kinda RIGHT y'know? keep em coming!:)
Wednesday, 14 May 2008 18:13
OK, the opening conversation between Kaylee and Jayne is fabulous! Maybe the best first line to a fic I've ever seen LOL! And I love that the Z/W argument isn't explained, just carries on to hover in the background of the whole chapter. You handle that very well, and I hope it continues.

You do have a few spots of grammar oddness. A beta reader would be of great use; if you ever have a chance to snare one I highly recommend it.

Then there's the new character... interesting plot starter, although her last line gives me alarm bells. Please don't be some fictional version of the fic writer. I'm overfull of Mary Sue-ness!
Friday, 16 May 2008 01:29
Hey nice opening, very solid fic, with some great character captures.
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