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Broken - Part X

Saturday, February 23, 2008

Maya. Post-BDM. The crew wait to find out if Hank's plan works, and Mal and the others ponder what to do next. Oh, and River's in labour. NEW CHAPTER

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Jayne was dragging the bodies into one corner of the warehouse to keep them out from underfoot if there was another fight going to happen, and taking the opportunity to go through their pockets as he did so, while Mal and Zoe peered gingerly out of the door.

“How many you figure?” Mal asked, trying to see through the still driving rain.

“Can’t tell, sir. Possibly another four. Maybe five.”

“At least the odds are a bit better this time.”

“We could use the mule, make a break for it,” she suggested.

“They’d be able to pick us off too easy, and at least one of us would be likely to be hit.” He shook his head. “And I’m more than a trifle concerned about what he said about Serenity.”

“You think Freya can’t handle them, sir?”

“Frey’s hurt.”

She stared at him. “Badly?”

“I don’t know. She’s not talking.”

Now she could see the tight worry lines around his eyes. She knew them of old, when they were waiting for a patrol to come back from a recon during the war, when he could feel in his gut that something had gone wrong, that his men were lying in a ditch somewhere, bleeding their life into the mud. “She’ll be fine. You’d know otherwise, Mal,” she said softly.

His lips twitched at her use of his first name. “Always figured that.”

“How come no-one’s come to find out what the noise is?” Jayne asked, coming up behind them, unaware of the conversation.

“It’s a public holiday,” Zoe said, surprising them both. “Hank looked it up,” she explained. “And I'm guessing the rain’s keeping most folks inside. Unless they’re crazy.”

“You mean like us?” Mal smiled at her, then looked out of the door. A bullet thudded into the doorframe, throwing up wood chips. He ducked back, swearing, as he reached up to his cheek and dug out a large splinter. He could feel blood running freely down his skin and he pressed against the small wound. He looked at Zoe. “You know, I think someone just tried to kill me.”

“That’s unusual, sir,” she said, deadpan, earning a raised eyebrow from her capt

Comments
Saturday, 23 February 2008 13:24
Well now, this chapter was certainly action-packed. And very well done, by the way! :D
Saturday, 23 February 2008 14:30
Wondering whether we're going to see Prater and Jasper again. Even though mercy is the mark of a great man, a good plot device is revenge, best served cold. All your actions led to a great big culmination which you do so very well - kudos to you! Great story once again.
Saturday, 23 February 2008 14:58
Action packed and full of complications. Prater and Jasper can exact revenge but there's still the matter of Sully. I know Mal's not going to be too happy with him either.

What about Bethy, Ethan, Hope and Jessie? I hope the are OK.
Saturday, 23 February 2008 16:21
ARGHHHH! That's no place to leave off!

Great work, as always. I'm surprised that Jayne doesn't kill Prater, but, in his defense, he does have other things on his mind, lol.

Maybe once the baby gets here, River will be okay again. Well, as Okay as River can be. Come to think of it, though, that's not all that okay, is it?

Interesting to see what 'talents' the bambino has too, seeing as it's one half genius and the other half. . .not.

Really enjoying this arc, Jane!
Sunday, 24 February 2008 10:18
Loved this, that was full of tense moments and nice to have Hank being all Heroic and giving our benighted friends the chance to turn the tables on Prater and his gang. I am hoping whatever wound Prater has will kill him nice and slow so he can contemplate all his errors in life, like being born. Leaving the man alive will prove to be a mistake I am sure because I can't see you leaving him alive for any other reason. As for River, I hope she will let Simon help her and not put the baby in more distress than necessary. At least Jayne will get back in time for the birth! And hooray, you didn't send a wounded Frey out to help Mal and co. Can't wait to see them all reunited! Ali D :~)
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