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Slender Thread - Part IX

Sunday, February 3, 2008

Maya. Post-BDM. Hank's stuck on the hull, and Mal's desperately trying to come up with a plan. NEW CHAPTER

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“Okay, that was scary,” Hank said out loud as the shuddering died away beneath his feet.

Looking around anxiously, he was at least glad to see Serenity didn’t appear to be damaged in any way. “Not that I could do anything about it anyway,” he said out loud. “It’s not like I could run after anything might have fallen off.”

He realised he was talking to himself, and laughed shortly. “Great,” he added, shaking his head inside his suit. “Always knew I was crazy. Just goes to prove it.” Still, that juddering had unnerved him somewhat. “Much more of that and I’ll be needing to change my underwear when I get back,” he quipped. “And here I am, being all humorous, and no-one around to be impressed.”

Sighing heavily and fogging his faceplate for a moment, he continued on towards the array, trying hard not to think of all the things that could have caused his ship to judder like that.

-

Zoe watched as the tiny figure moved up the curve of the Firefly’s neck to the top. It paused, and appeared to crouch down.

“You be careful,” she murmured, too low for the children in the back of the shuttle to hear. “Just got you broken in. Don’t want to have to find someone new right now.” She absently toyed with the band on her finger.

Behind her Bethie and Ethan were staring at each other, but the little girl put her finger to her lips. Better Auntie Zoe didn’t know. No point in worrying her.

-

“I can’t do anything,” Kaylee admitted, wiping her greasy hands for the thousandth time on the piece of rag stuffed into her pocket. “Got no more control over that than over the lights.”

“Can’t you just cut it?” Freya asked. “Actually pull the circuits?”

“Wouldn’t help. This ain’t just a code been activated to stop you telling the doors to open. This is physical locks in place. Removing the circuit boards ain’t gonna make them undo.” She looked tense, unhappy. “Pretty much our only hope is that it’ll reset itself, like some of the other systems’ve done.”

“Not our hope I’m worrie

Comments
Sunday, 03 February 2008 11:16
Oh dear! Frey and Hank, in the bay, together. Frey will probably kill him before Kaylee can get things worked out, ROFL. Great way to keep the suspense on!
Sunday, 03 February 2008 12:04
I really thought Freya's reason for being the one to go out after Hank sucked. What crap that she had to do it because Mal had to stay behind and think Captainy thoughts. You just wanted to put Frey in jeopardy again admit it. Really worrying now not just about poor Hank but every gorram one. That damned AI ship is out thinking them at every turn but without being held back by anything human like sorrow or remorse or compassion. Gorramit, I sure hope Kaylee can pull the metaphorical rabbit out of the hat in time. Really love how you are keeping the tension up on this brilliant story! Just don't, for this once, don't let Frey get hurt this time. Think of the novelty value if nothing else. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 03 February 2008 13:46
This arc is just unrelentingly tense! I would ask what could possibly happen next, but I'm afraid I'd find out! Yikes! To quote Willie Wonka..."The suspense is terrible. I hope it lasts."
Sunday, 03 February 2008 14:42
Oh dear. Seems things are going from bad to worse! But thank you so much for posting ;)
Sunday, 03 February 2008 14:43
LOL slumming! You put it perfectly. I have NO fingernails left.
Sunday, 03 February 2008 18:54
You are so very good at ratcheting up the tension until it hurts! And you make it feel sooo good. Loved the bit with Ethan and Zoe especially, and Mal and Kaylee. It was very special that Hank could use Zoe's strength to calm himself down. Loved that everyone's strengths and weaknesses were taken into account - from Simon hating to go outside, to Mal's impulse to go himself, but trapped in his Captain's role. Very in character and very very exciting. There's something very special in the relationship between Ethan and Zoe, though. Most likely a reflection of her relationship with Mal. Don't know where you're going with this but it's a good ride!
Monday, 04 February 2008 12:37
well i'm late to the party here! Great chapter - your original characters really provoke as much as the crew. nicely done:)
Monday, 04 February 2008 16:13
On the edge of my seat waiting for more.

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