Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

World Without End - Part XIII

Saturday, January 19, 2008

Maya. Post-BDM. The night before and the morning, and various conversation. NEW CHAPTER (Please forgive if it isn't up to scratch - not too well at the moment!)

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3478    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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River sat quietly, her hands folded in what remained of her lap, her eyes closed. She was listening to the small sounds of the night as it pressed in around her, the old building behind her creaking and groaning as timbers cooled, insects playing their symphonies in the trees, and out beyond the wall something small and furry ended its life in a high-pitched squeak, and something else flew back off on silent wings, its prize clasped tightly in razor talons.

Almost at the edge of her perception she could feel others, the souls who had come to this place seeking redemption, safety … or just someone to talk to. Some stayed, became Shepherds like Book, others took what they needed and moved on, but they had all left their imprint on the Abbey like pictures on a capture tab. If she reached out just a little more, she could see them, clustered around the old building like moths to a flame …

“What are you doing?” Freya asked, standing observing the young woman as much as she could in the starlight.

“Communing.”

“Who with?”

“Whoever wishes to speak to me.” River opened her eyes and looked up. “Is that for me?”

Freya looked down at Jayne’s coat in her hands. “It is. It’s somewhat chilly out tonight, and I don’t want you catching cold before the wedding tomorrow.”

“You know that’s a fallacy, don’t you?” the young woman said, standing up anyway and slipping it on. She hugged it around herself, like Jayne’s arms.

“Fallacy or not, you have to keep well. For all our sakes.”

River sat down again. “Why are you here?” she asked, arranging her knees under the large jacket. “I thought you were tired.”

Freya joined her on the stone seat. “Mal’s put Ethan and Jesse to bed, and he’s reading them a story about a boy who jumps through doorways into different worlds. It’s fun and energetic and will keep them awake for ages, so I thought I’d come and find out why you aren’t in bed.”

“Not sleepy.”

“Big day tomorrow.”

“A beginning. And an ending.”

“Ending?”

“No more River T

Comments
Saturday, 19 January 2008 02:32
Totally awesome, especially the garden scene. Stunning. Just Stunning. Possibly your best work ever, Jane.

Good dialogue between Jayne and Freya as well, touching and honest. Two good friends, who maybe understand each other even better than their respective spouses.

I just can't see how this could have been any better.
Saturday, 19 January 2008 12:31
Loved this to itty bitty pieces and am I the only one who had a little tear in my eye when River is showing Freya the ghosts of the garden and Book joins them? I would have loved it if when Mal appeared Freya had found a way to show him to Mal. Might have eased his mind a little knowing the good man was still there in some way and would watch over the weddings. I also loved Inara and Kaylee surprising an anxious Zow with what is sure to be the perfect dress for her wedding. Brilliant job, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 19 January 2008 15:28
I loved your little jaunt into the supernatural with Book and Amon. Your description of the garden was unworldly enough to be very real depiction of the unseen world. Great!

Sorry you're under the weather. If THIS is what you can accomplish when you're sick, nothing can stand in your way!

Waiting for the next section eagerly. Bethany's Noah was a perfect parallel with couples pairing up on a boat. And loving that Mal is going to be giving the brides away.
Saturday, 19 January 2008 16:09
Beautifully done! With your opening disclaimer, I was expecting a lot less, and I was pleasantly disappointed! Every word of this was simply lovely!
Monday, 21 January 2008 14:25
Good Stuff. Everyones interaction was great. I think I liked Hank asking Simon for help the best.

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