Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Flood of Grief

Thursday, November 29, 2007

Post-BDM. It's a bit longer than i meant to, originally; apologies. Yes, it's a Zoë-centric piece...and...it's about grief...you're not required to read it. i'd like to thank valeriebean for editing and for the title; and then also to dedicate to the memory of a really great guy who died and sort of inspired me to write this one. but all characters belong to Joss. Comments welcome.

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Rain pattered against the ground relentlessly, forming puddles and squirmy rivulets of water against the cracked ground. Lightning flashed overhead, bringing a momentary flash of clarity to the canyon where Serenity sat silently. The shadows pounced upon the open dock door with the lightning's receding brilliance, attacking the warm glow of the waiting ship. The clean smell of the rain rode the misty winds into that warmth as the crew waited for Inara's shuttle to return so that they could leave the tired moon behind them.

Zoë sat just inside the dock door, the mist finding her as she watched the rain fall...letting her thoughts go where they would. It seemed they had more in common with the storm than she would have believed. They surfaced in recognizable words and phrases as quickly as the lightning flashed around her, floundering in dark clouds of confusion and the outpouring of the somewhat-expected grief otherwise. She watched the rain act as curtains for the canyon, keeping details from her line of vision; she recognized the familiarity of the sight. It seemed, not for the first time, that her mind was filled with similar pockets of emptiness surrounded by shrouds of emotional waterfalls. She listened to the thunder rumble in the distance; knew the storm was coming their way. Her thoughts turned, as they often did, to Wash and how she ached to have him near her again. Not for the first time, she wondered why worlds continued to spin, people continued to live and love and go forward after he'd left. It felt as though everything in nature should have been affected by his death. That rain should fall differently, slower, or with more care than it had when he had been by her side. She wanted everyone to be able to see that a good man had passed on, something so tangible and so real that no one could deny a loss had happened. Why didn't everyone know he was gone, and that a hole had opened up where he had once been? Why didn't everyone stop moving and sit down? Why did the rain insist on continuing t

Comments
Thursday, 29 November 2007 06:25
Very, very beautiful. I ached with Zoe as the worlds kept turning against all reason. Favorite lines:

"Everything had seemed hell-bent on introducing him into her life...why was it all in such a hurry to move on now that he was gone?" -> that as an amazingly powerful question.

"Why do I have to be in one piece when he gets to be everywhere around us?" -> And this one tore me through!

"But we do get time off, right?" -> And that's just classic Jayne making me laugh. I like that you ended with a laugh.

Thursday, 29 November 2007 08:51
I think a wonderful description of Zoe's grief. And Mal was so ... Mal, in that he wanted to be there for when she needed him, but not knowing she needed him then. And yes, I agree, ending on a laugh was a good antidote to all that had gone before.
Thursday, 29 November 2007 13:24
This was a great way to describe grief as a contrast between private pain and walls and barriers, and shared grief with companions and the healing it brings. This may well be the best Zoe's grief story I've read yet.
Thursday, 29 November 2007 14:40
I really liked this. I know how hard handling grief can be as I lost my husband young as well. You never really recover but you do learn to cope. Ali D :~)
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CHINA
Thursday, 29 November 2007 23:25
I always wanted to continue into the black with Mal and everyone else. I felt robbed when the story abruptly ended. Wash was such the everyman and so likeable. This story did justice to his and zoe's bond and the deep loss.

MERRYWYN
Wednesday, 28 May 2008 01:08
This was great! I cried through the whole thing but I had to laugh at the last line, perfect end to the story
Thursday, 29 May 2008 05:11
Just a great piece of art. Wonderfully worded and a superb piece to not only cry to, but to laugh. :) Thnks for sharing.

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