Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL
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Thursday, 19 August 2004 18:17
Wow. I liked that entirely. The twists and turns, the fact that Clarence is invisible yet is, apparently, entirely real as we see scenes from his point of view. The backstory flashback was good, had a vivid atmosphere to it. There was something powerful in "Those of us who escaped got shipped off to Hera" in that was the line was chilling in a simple, understated way that worked better than if you'd expounded on the point.
Thursday, 19 August 2004 22:23
This was all kinds of different and I can't wait to see what is going to happen next. The part about the undead made me think of Buffy and vampires and such like. It will be interesting to see what comes of the Blue Sun involvement. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 21 August 2004 00:12
Thanks. I was actually a bit worried that the flashback would be a bit too wordy.
The Chi'ang Sh'ich will appear in the next chapter, and they'll be an unpleasant surprise for Mal. <give off a Shadow-style laugh>
The Chi'ang Sh'ich will appear in the next chapter, and they'll be an unpleasant surprise for Mal. <give off a Shadow-style laugh>
Saturday, 21 August 2004 22:45
As a note, I have make significant revisions to this chapter to eliminate a couple of out of character moments.
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