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She Don’t Know

Wednesday, June 20, 2007

Jayne’s an observant man, but Kaylee hasn’t noticed.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2927    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Title: She Don’t Know

Author: hisgoodgirl

Disclaimer: All belongs to Joss.

Characters: Jayne and Kaylee (sorta), Kaylee and Simon (sorta).

Warning: PG-15; mild profanity, vague sexual reference.

Setting: During the series.

Word Count: 735

A/N: I recently watched Firefly on a huge projection screen for the first time during a Firefly Marathon hosted by the Charlotte Browncoats. Maybe it was the large format, but I really noticed how often Jayne is surreptitiously watching Kaylee. Previously posted in the jaylee_ship and ff_fanfic comms at LJ.

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She Don’t Know

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She don’t know how I watch her.

Can’t help doin’ it, pretty as she is. And it’s more’n just the pretty – it’s her sweetness, always laughin’ and doin’ nice stuff for everybody. I once heard Shepherd talk about how some folks just seem to have some kinda light inside. I ain't exactly sure what he meant, but if it was true of anybody, that li’l gal does.

I give her grief and act like she’s annoyin’ me, but the truth is, just bein’ ‘round her makes me feel better. Can’t let on, though. Sure as I did and they was to find out how I feel about her, I’d be the laughin’ stock of the gorramned boat. So, I act all rude’n pissy an’ they don’t get no ideas.

She keeps us flyin’ safe, too. I never knowed anyone with such a knack for mechanical workin’s. Almost like the girl’s got some kinda intruition, tells her when there’s a problem or some part’s about to fuck up. She gets me to help her sometimes with heavy work, ‘cause I’m real strong and can lift and reach stuff she can’t manage. I bitch about it, but I really don’t mind. She’s right adorable with her hair in a tangle and her face all greasy. Don’t hurt none, neither, when them overalls ride way low on her hips or she bends forward an’ I can see half way to Paradiso.

Yeah, I watch her.

I’m good at bein’ sneaky and doin’ stuff without o

Comments
Wednesday, 20 June 2007 14:33
awwwwwwww........ Jayne! step up! be a man! go after her!!!!

this is all kinds of cute, hisgoodgirl. thanks for sharing.
Wednesday, 20 June 2007 15:45
I echo the last poster's comments <BEG>.


Vera
Wednesday, 20 June 2007 15:47
I could see this scenario and it is nice to see Jayne thinking things through about how Simon doesn't say the things Kaylee would love to hear. I think Jayne and Kaylee have a lot in common because of their backgrounds and the planets they come from, perhaps more than any two people on Serenity. But all the while Kaylee is starry eyed over Simon she won't see notice Jayne lingering in the wings. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 20 June 2007 19:34
I third those comments. A really sweet fic!
Thursday, 21 June 2007 02:35
this was utterly fantastic! you got right in the voice...like you were sitting inside Jayne's head and just stole his thoughts, typed them out word-for-word and posted them (THANKFULLY) for all of us to read! aww...that's just so sweet!
Thursday, 21 June 2007 12:47
Thanks, all, for the great feedback. I happen to have a VERY Jayne-like husband and an ear for accents and speach patterns, both of which help. But mostly, I just love the character and love the show.
Monday, 25 June 2007 02:34
Utterly brilliant stuff here, HGG...though you missed out on mentioning the scene from "Serenity" when Jayne is watching Simon patch Kaylee up after she got shot:(

Still...Jayne would do this if he had an interest in Kaylee, without a doubt. Though I do wonder if another BDH - Zoe, or perhaps Inara? - are more aware of his behavuour...

However, I think it would be mighty shiny to see a Kaylee POV piece about this, studying how she's aware of Jayne's observations of her and close proximity on occasion. Maybe look at how she's appreciative of the effort, but (currently) wishes it was Simon doing all that...though do allow for some Jaylee thoughts to crop up by all means;D

BEB

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