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Sunday, June 3, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Last in the short series set during the night Serenity leaves Lazarus. And there's only one couple left ...

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Sometimes he just watches her. After they make love usually it’s him who falls asleep first, his arm wrapped around her, their heartbeats blending as one, but occasionally he keeps the dreams at bay until he feels her breathing ease, her body relax against him. Then he opens his eyes and watches her.

The chin that might be a little too strong for true beauty, the firm jaw line that juts forward when they argue, almost an entity in its own right. The small scar that only he knows about just beneath her right ear where a man tried to slit her throat when she was eighteen. He’s glad the man failed, that the would-be murderer lies beneath six feet of earth.

Her lips, soft, pale pink, that swell under his. Bowed delicately at the top, they are just the right size for his mouth, even when she is railing against something stupid he’s done. He smiles. And good teeth.

She moves a little, settling more securely into the crook of his shoulder. A slight sigh escapes those very lips he has been contemplating, and they turn up at the ends.

He wonders what she is dreaming about, hoping it is about him, and that the smile is for no-one else. He continues.

Her nose is just a nose, neither too long nor too short, with just the slightest hint of an upturned end. Freckles, too, a mere handful of tiny dark specks, apart from one larger just beyond the corner of her eye, adorning a cheek that holds round apples of flesh when she grins.

Her eyes he has to envision, closed as they are, the lashes fluttering as her dream progresses. But it is only the work of a moment to conjure their hazel hues, containing the small flecks of gold that dazzle him. When she laughs he melts from the way she looks at him, but when she cries he wants to be her hero and put the ‘verse to right.

And when she says she loves him, that emotion shouts as clearly from her eyes as a man shouting from a church steeple.

What do those eyes see when she looks at him? Does she see the nose that is too big, the lips that thin in anger

Comments
Sunday, 03 June 2007 17:42
What unbelievably imagery! I absolutely love this ... it makes me all warm and fuzzy inside. I can completely see Mal waxing poetic about the beauty of his mate, whether it be Freya, Inara or some other beauty. He is a romantic at heart!
Sunday, 03 June 2007 19:32
You definitely saved the best for last, didn't ya Jane0904? I say this because this is some utterly, utterly beautiful work you've done here:D

Have to say though...it's rather ironic how you have Mal refer to Freya in his mind at the end of this story: "...his strength, his COMPANION, knowing she'll be there for ever. And a day." While I doubt you did this consciously or intentionally, it's quite telling to see Mal use this descriptor about Freya...it emphasizes Freya's anchoring and supportive presence compared to Inara's fogging and often-absent one.

BEB
Sunday, 03 June 2007 21:28
That was all kinds of lovely! Such beautifully evocative description is a pleasure to read!
Sunday, 03 June 2007 22:10
Yay, my heart just melts at a romantic Mal lying in the arms of the woman he loves (sigh). I also loved how she wakes to open his eyes and show him the love he needs to see shining in her eyes, a reaffirmation of what joins them soul deep. Lovely, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 25 July 2008 19:19
"Sleep fills his mind like a heavy cloth"--great image.

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