Where I Belong: Part VI of VI
Wednesday, May 30, 2007
Simon regains his memory after a bit of a shocking disclosure. S/K
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 3371 RATING: 9.0 (PG13) SERIES: FIREFLY
Notes: For many, multiple reasons, I just needed to post this and be done with it. It’s much longer than the other Parts. I'm not happy with it, but I'm unwilling to look at it further. Enjoy – or not. It’s probably the last thing that’ll come out of me for a while.
Thanks to those who read and commented!
Thanks to http://www.fireflyfans.net/showprofile.asp?un=mal4prez>Mal4Prez for the beta.
Part I can be found:http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16528 >Here
Part II: http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16547>; Here.
Part III: http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16579>; Here
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16603>; Part IV
http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16658>; Part V
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Where I Belong
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Part VI
“I really think you need to see Simon.” Zoe held Kaylee’s hair as she bent over the small sink and emptied the contents of her stomach into it.
“I can’t, Zoe. Not yet. It ain’t the right time.” She stood up and wiped her mouth on a nearby towel and scowled into it when she noticed Zoe’s raised eyebrow in the mirror.
“Don’t think there’s gonna be one now.”
“It just – “ Kaylee turned away, cursing her inability to talk to Simon. He’d had a lot of painful days right after getting back; having to maneuver his injured body around the ship and up the stairs. It hadn’t been the right time – then. She’d waited patiently for him to regain his memory like the doctors in the hospital said he would. But it had never happened.
And as the weeks passed, it seemed to get even more difficult to work up the courage to say something. Even when she’d tried to drop hints about they days he’d lost, she couldn’t go any further than those hints. She should have just come out and told him; dealt with the consequences then instead of making herself sick over it now.
“You need to tell him.”
“Not yet. I just –“
Excellent work, as usual, though I do think that the convulsing and remembering thing has become a bit stale. I very much enjoyed the "he remembers" discussion though I was a bit disappointed by the ending; it just seemed to hang.
As I haven't commented on the previous chapters, I have to say that they were very well done aswell. I liked the setting; despite the fact that much of the personality of the people in the 'verse comes from their experiences in the war, we see very few fics where Serenity and the crew are in such a situation. I think that you handled their reactions very well.
Sorry to hear that your going to be away from posting for awhile, just promise me that it won't be permanentlike.
-gbg
"It’s probably the last thing that’ll come out of me for a while."
^^ WHAT? NO! I RELY ON YOU FOR S/K GOODNESS!!
Okay, that's out of my system. Ahem.
This was really good, as usual. But I have to agree the ending seemed abrupt. It seems there is a lot more to see... baby aside, Simon and Kaylee need to talk about how they both actually feel.
That said, this was amazingly well written and theres nothing a sequel can't fix.
Still loving the Zoe-Kaylee dynamic. And the line about Jayne not noticing was funny. The thought that Simon would have lied... stopped me short. Really good touch there.
Love it, ten!
xxxx
I really did like the "Simon remembers" bit and I'm glad that you had Zoe be the person Kaylee's confidant, it seemed fitting in a lot of ways. And of course, the S/K goodness was excellent - can I get Simon to rub my back when I don't feel good?
I too honestly thought Simon's moment of remembrance was a bit hackneyed, but I can't imagine being able to do a moment like this any better. I would imagine people with amnesia have trigger episodes that come at all kinds of odd times and cause the person to react in all kinds of weird ways. I am glad though that Simon has remembered his night of passion with Kaylee.
And as much as the reason for Kaylee's silence about The Night and the resulting consequences is something I don't completely agree with, I can totally see Kaylee subsuming her own feelings and pain to keep Simon from getting stressed out. That and it's quite plausible that due to using cheaper versions of common contraceptives, a swimmer or two would storm the beaches.
Final verdict? Brilliant story that I could totally imagine Joss & Co. telling, though the final part does suffer a bit of dragging. Oh...and you take whatever time is needed away from here, Leiasky. We'll be here for your triumphant return;)
BEB
You can't take the sky from me
Loved it, very glad Simon remembered and that he didn't screw it up when he did.
And your last made me laugh.
I have to agree with almost everyone, the ending needs more ;p Like another 20 chapters XD
But I still really enoyed it, your S/K goodness.
It's a pity this will be the last thing you post for a while T.T Your one of my favourite sources of S/K goodness. But I look forward to reading more from you in the future, so enjoy the break and I hope you come back inspired to write many more stories.
First off, I gave you a six. Don't take it personally. As always, your writing is brilliant, and you perfectly capture their relationship, which makes this, and everything else you've ever written, worth reading. Although personally I feel that 'Finding our Way' and 'Book of Days' were your best work, damnit, some of the best fanfic work I've EVER READ! You are one in a million, but, unfortunately with 999,999 imitators.
The problem, Leiasky, is the storyline, the 'Simon loses his memory' one. I'm utterly thankful that the Alliance, or even his parents, weren't directly responsible for doing it, because I probably would've stopped reading. The story is old, and done. For example, TamSibling, another writer of similar work, did this storyline not once, but <i>twice!</i> It's quite frankly getting tiresome. The reason I gave you a six is because of your writing talents alone, and for that, I congratulate you.
Now, please write something original. That it will be good is a given. On the Edge was fantastic, and I await the sequel (I know there is one - I have my sources!).
:D
BrainSpecialist.
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