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SECOND CHANCES: Chapter 2

Tuesday, May 15, 2007

Kaylee is still troubled by her inability to conceive, while Rafe sees a side of River he's never seen before. Mal/Inara, Simon/Kaylee, River/Rafe

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3023    RATING: 10.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: I really appreciate everyone's comments on chapter 1. I'm so glad that it's being so well-received.

Thanks again to Leiasky for the beta and story direction and to Kaynara for the consult.

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Chapter 2

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Eli rounded the corner into the ER, hoping to track down the wayward Doctor Tam, and found Kaylee instead, pacing the length of the small waiting room, her hands clenched tightly before her.

Pausing for a moment to regard the young woman who he very much considered a daughter, Eli put one of his biggest grins on his face and said, “Kaylee, my dear. Whatever are you doing here?”

Turning at the sound of her name, Kaylee gave him a nervous smile, before meeting the older doctor halfway and embracing him. Stepping back she answered, “Oh, one of the lil’ ones had a fall. Needed to bring him for a cast.”

“Ah, so that’s where Simon went in such a hurry?” Eli’s eyes held their requisite twinkle of good humor. “I should have guessed you were involved. The boy never moves that fast for me.” As Kaylee smiled a bit more widely and a bit more genuinely at this comment, Eli took her hands in his and asked, “So, is everything else all right?”

The wide-eyed look that flashed across Kaylee’s face lasted for only a second, but Eli caught it. The girl was far too cheerful, Eli and his family had long ago determined that. But her good nature was also contagious and given the alternative, Eli would rather spend all his days with a bright light like Kaylee than a sour puss. But her behavior now, nervous and edgy was quite unlike her and Eli, concerned as a friend and physician, was determined to discover its cause.

Wrapping an arm around her shoulders, he guided her to a nearby chair and teased lightly, “I know. You’ve finally decided to leave Simon for a somewhat older and far wiser man.”

Kaylee laughed outright at the statement, playfully swatting at his arm. “I’m gonna tell Evelyn you said that.”

Hol

Comments
Tuesday, 15 May 2007 07:37
Hopefully by the time I finish typing this someone else has commented, I always feel such pressure when writing the first one :(

Anyway, that was awesome. Very emotional, please let River be alright; hasn't she been through enough? I love her relationship with Rafe, it's so cute.

Fav line was 'Mal had a quick mental flash of Kaylee chasing after River with a torque wrench.' The wrench thing was the cherry.

I'm sure you have some diabolical reason why Kaylee hasn't gotten pregnant, and while I look forward to your next update, I'm not too keen on what that reason might be.
BTW: You're breaking my heart with all the pain. ;)
Tuesday, 15 May 2007 07:38
Holy crap that was long! (For me)
And no one else commented!
Tuesday, 15 May 2007 10:46
Oh dear

We should have known things would all go to hell in one of your stories. You just like to torture them all, don't you?

Saying that, this is, as always, an amazing chapter. I really felt Kaylee's pain. And I like Rafe, you managed to blend him into the crew flawlessly. And he and River are cute.

One little thing I noticed - "I wanna another chance." Shouldn't that be "I wanna 'nother chance," or something. You just have the 'a' sound twice.

But truly, this was an awesome chapter. Can't wait for more. :)
xxx
SUSANAH
Tuesday, 15 May 2007 18:21
Very angsty but still very sweet! Seriously, I think Kaylee may need a psychologist more than she needs a gynocologist. She may have to refer Inara if things go badly on that end. I think Mal is right about setting herself up for more pain.
Wednesday, 16 May 2007 02:45
*sigh*...why must my comments keep getting eaten? It sends the wrong impression:(

Utterly fabulous work here in any case, TamSibling! Really gotta give you props for successfully balancing the angst of 3 out of the 4 female BDHs here. Between Inara's depression and ire over her daughter, River's angst about her burgeoning relationship with Rafe and Kaylee's sadness and guilt over wanting to get pregnant again...definitely not a great time for the women bar Zoe.

BEB
Wednesday, 16 May 2007 21:32
I still really love the ease with which Eli can joke with Kaylee and Simon.

I get the feeling Kaylee's obsession over getting pregnant is going to cause all kinds of problems.

Bring on the angst!

Maybe she'll get pregnant and lose that one too because she's so stressed . . .

Moi? Mean and evil? Well, yes. :)

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