Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eden - Part VIII

Wednesday, May 2, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. The rescue, and people die ... epilogue to come, folks. PG for implied horror. Please feedback - for us writers it's lifeblood.

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“What is taking so gorram long?” Mal was pacing, unable to keep still.

“It’s only been five minutes,” Simon said, not feeling that much calmer himself.

Jayne understood, though. Inside that room, with that ga ni niang doing things to ‘em, were the two most important women in Mal’s life. His first mate and his wife. The one who’d kept him alive all through the war, and the one who made it worth living now. “She’s going fast as she can,” he said. “It twists a lot.”

“She’s telling you?” Simon asked in surprise. She’d rarely dropped her thoughts into his mind, and to find this big man mentioning it so nonchalantly, as if it happened all the time …

“Yeah,” Jayne admitted. “You got a problem with that?”

As much as Simon wanted to say yes, to admit it hurt him more than he wanted that his little sister would communicate with this mercenary ape, he remembered her words.

“Does he make you happy, mei-mei ?” he’d asked.

Yes.

“Why?”

Does there have to be a reason?

He’d had to tell the truth. “I suppose not.”

Be happy for me, Simon.

“River … I’ll try.”

So Simon shook his head. “No. If she talks to you … that’s fine.”

Jayne nodded, for once not taking the opportunity to make fun of the young doctor. Not at a time like this. “She’s there,” he said quietly.

Mal jerked, staring at the big man before laying his hands on the door.

---

River watched through the grating, doing the math. Five men, including Niska. She’d never seen him in the flesh, but didn’t need to. It was him. Of the others, only three were really any threat, but they were real enough.

Time to act. They’d put Hank into some sort of tube, and from the feelings and thoughts emanating from the two women chained to the wall, this was bad. Very, very bad.

Triangulate, measure, aim … everything was going through River’s mind at once, as she tried to block out the fear below and outside, the anger beating at her. If they’d all just shut up she could …

She kick

Comments
Wednesday, 02 May 2007 09:32
I love it! This is brilliant! I can't wait for the ending number. But, it wont exactly be ending. It will go on, right? Yes? Good!

I love how you turned Niska into mini-Reaver dude. But, wow.. Yeah! I wonder if he'll make a cameo in the next one!

Hmm.. and PLEASE don't let Zoe's baby die! Please! please please please please please please please please please please please....
Wednesday, 02 May 2007 11:33
Glad to see the BDH's surviving in one piece. You always seem to have a surplus of twists and turns for your story line. The hidden level on the station was very inventive. Well done as always!
Wednesday, 02 May 2007 16:19
Sweet - although I really think Freya should have killed Reaver-Niska. Some idiot is going to let him out of that room and then he'll wreak havoc on the station until someone kills him.

But I liked the way this resolved for so many other reasons. I think that the interplay between everyone at the end (when they're "safe") was perfect. Can't wait for the epi!
Wednesday, 02 May 2007 18:28
Okay, now my heart rate's up. That was intense! Twists and turns everywhere! Great work!
Wednesday, 02 May 2007 18:49
Whew, my heart is racing. And I have to go back to work and appear sane.

You needed to end Reaver-Niska so he doesn't turn up again. I have a feeling he will.
Monday, 07 May 2007 02:50
Niska as a Reaver?! Oh crap...now THERE is a thought I don't want to muse on!

;)

Utterly superb work here, Jane0904! The amount of tension and action was perfectly balanced, and I can't wait to see more about the fallout from this;D

BEB
Wednesday, 09 May 2007 20:27
Oh, Wow, this was FABULOUS! And what a perfect punishment for Niska to turn him into the thing he was turning others into. Having him cut on himself until the madness rages enough to kill him. So very happy that it was Freya who got to shove him in the tube and drop in the gas. Yep, payback is a bitch. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Sunday, 18 October 2009 20:47
Wash helping Hank... Priceless.. Progressing wondiferessly.... Im so Hoooooked!!! Jayne/River are getting comfortable and is it Me?? or is she making more sense..:)

As I turn the page..
Sunday, 18 October 2009 20:49
I know.. Im so far behind.. Im just glad I can read these at work.. lol.. :)

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