Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Eden - Part VI

Monday, April 30, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Things just go from bad to much, much worse as traps are sprung ... PG to be on the safe side. Thanks so much to everyone who comments - it means a great deal to me!

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“I’m not the man you were.”

“Nope.”

“That’s not helpful.”

“Sorry, was I supposed to be?”

“Yeah. Tell me how you survived this.”

“You think I …” There was a chuckle. “If it hadn’t been for Zoe I’d be dead. Well, dead before I actually … you know … died. So would Mal.”

“I’m too weak.”

“It ain’t weakness, Hank. Just humanity. Something these creeps are sadly lacking in.” There was a pause. “So what do you think Mal would do?”

“Spit in his eye?”

“Damn straight.”

“I don’t know that I’ve got any spit left.”

“Metaphorically, then.”

“Oh, that I can probably manage.”

“Hank, my cupcake needs you. Be strong for her.”

“I’ll try.”

“Good lad.”

“They’re here,” Donaldson said.

“Shit,” Hank groaned.

“I second that,” Wash admitted, his voice fading away.

---

They’d barely spoken more than a dozen words since they’d detached the shuttle from Serenity and flown it back to Wayborn Skyplex. Now Zoe and Freya were walking through the crowds towards the centre of the complex, ignoring the vendors calling out to them, pushing through knots of people to get to their goal.

Hustle and bustle gave way to people huddled in small groups, their clothes old and ragged, no money to go anywhere so eking out some kind of living on the edge. Then only crates and dust.

“You really think he’s here?” Zoe asked.

“I don’t know.” Freya was watching ahead of them.

“How come you can’t feel him?”

“I can’t always. Even when I was … before the Naxom … it was hard to reach out to people sometimes.”

“River can’t either.”

“That doesn’t mean he’s dead,” Freya said quickly, knowing that was worrying Mal’s closest friend.

“I know.”

“Yet you can’t quite believe it.”

“I don’t see why anyone would take him in the first place.”

Freya stopped, putting her hand on Zoe’s arm, making her halt too. “When I was … when Wing … Hank believed for me. Believe for him now.”

“I do,” Zoe insisted. “But I’ve been proved wrong too many times.” She walked on. “He’s not lik

Comments
Monday, 30 April 2007 16:40
Come on, guys ... is it that bad?
Monday, 30 April 2007 18:43
Oh boy - this is just not going to end well, I can feel it!

Very interesting scene with Zoe, Freya and Hank in the torture room. I love Freya antagonizing Niska, even though it is ill-advised - it is so very in character for her!

Although I'm a little worried - did the stun weapon cause Zoe to lose the baby? I'm surprised she didn't think of that when she first woke up - or that Hank didn't either.

And of course, River charging to the rescue, while great, is also decidedly dangerous, for everyone. I can't wait for more!
Monday, 30 April 2007 23:33
This is going to be horrible, I know it. And like TamSibling said, I have a feeling too that it's not going end on a good note.
Thursday, 03 May 2007 01:15
Definitely have to agree with the mob (TamSibling and ncbrowncoat, in this case) about Zoe finding out the littlest member of the crew has been taken from them by Niska's guards:(

Still...brilliant writing here, Jane0904! Between the skillful use of tension, and the superbly balanced "will he?/won't he?"
moment over Jayne telling River he loves her before she enters the heating duct...I was enraptured;D

BEB
Wednesday, 09 May 2007 20:04
Oh yeah, River, time to kick bad ass something fierce I'm thinking! You really do like twisting the knife, just hope the Big Damn Rescue comes in time to get everyone out while they are still breathing. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me

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