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The Right To Love - Chapter 16

Wednesday, April 25, 2007

Penultimate Chapter to the Simon-Centric Story based on the 100 Prompt Table (See Link below). The fall-out of Inara's time with Niska is felt by both of Serenity's resident couples. And no one's handling it particularly well. Simon/Kaylee, Mal/Inara. Rated R for graphic description of violence and some indications of adult activities.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 4512    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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A/N: Okay, if you can't tell, I'm anxious to wrap this story up, so here is the penultimate chapter. I'll probably post the final chapter before the week's out. I hope you enjoy.

Previous Chapters:

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15760>Chapter 1, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15783>Chapter 2, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15892>Chapter 3, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15910>Chapter 4, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15954>Chapter 5, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16005>Chapter 6, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16062>Chapter 7, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16114>Chapter 8, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16131>Chapter 9, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16142>Chapter 10, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16184>Chapter 11, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16209>Chapter 12, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16247>Chapter 13, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16274>Chapter 14, http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=16296>Chapter 15

Link to http://www.geocities.com/maegovannen/Firefly/Joss100Challenge.html>prompt table

Thanks once again to Leiasky for the beta.

Everyone's comments have been so great - thanks for taking the time to write them and please, keep them coming! I crave positive reinforcement!

P.S. There's not a whole lotta fluff in these here parts, but there will be in the next!

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The Right To Love - Chapter 16 (Prompts 91-95)

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091. Visions

“She ain’t awake yet,” Mal told him harshly, towering over Simon as he made a few notes in Inara’s chart.

Turning to face him with a small sigh, Simon looked into his captain’s hard gaze and said, “I know, Mal. Unfortunately, it

Comments
Wednesday, 25 April 2007 20:13
Okay, 90 reads and NO reviews?

Do I have to beg people? I can promise you it will *not* be pretty ...
Wednesday, 25 April 2007 21:01
This is good. I look forward to seeing how you finish it up.
WHELP
Wednesday, 25 April 2007 22:42
Finish it, lad. You have to finish it. For a story to lay written, and still unposted? That makes its author a coward!
Wednesday, 25 April 2007 23:28
Wow, sorry I haven't commented before, but this story is amazing. It's really riveting. Plus, I'm a dedicated Mal/Inara shipper, so this is good stuff for me. :-)

jW
Thursday, 26 April 2007 00:42
mal was being soooo bitchy to simon and kaylee! what was that, serious man-pms or something? how did he not get what was coming to him for completely lashing out at them like that, especially when they had gone through the same thing? blasted man deserves to be thrown out the airlock. great story, by the way.
Thursday, 26 April 2007 01:47
Wow! the last two chapters have been powerful and compelling...Mal's really driven to the edge here. Simon got it right about Mal feeling guilty about getting involved with Niska in the first place and then not killing him when he had the chance.

I could easily see something like this happening, if the series had continued, and that's what makes this so real and scary as hell, because Niska lives. Nice work, as usual
Thursday, 26 April 2007 05:06
I honestly posted before with a sweet-ass comment, TamSibling! Honestly! Bloody site keeps eating my comments:(

So...to recap:

1) Utter brilliance as usual;)

2) Really was hoping for Simon to lay into Mal, especially when Mal targeted Kaylee;

3) Mal's smug triumph when he tells Inara his refusal to leave is just comeuppance when she wouldn't leave his bedside after Niska got him again;

4) Beautiful couples' moments between Mal and Inara, and Simon and Kaylee. Really showed all kinds of facets to their relationships:D

BEB
Thursday, 26 April 2007 12:45
Aww, that was all so sweet.

Fav part was when Simon told Mal off, I actually went 'oh!' out loud and my sister thinks I'm crazy now.
Thursday, 26 April 2007 19:08
Simon needed to lay into Mal for even thinking to blame Kaylee. I'm thinking bruising that roguish face of Mal's would be sufficient payback . . .

Friday, 27 April 2007 16:07
Go Simon! Finally showing a bit of that spine.

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