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Who Shall Stand

Monday, April 23, 2007

[Poetry] The traditional penalty for theft is hanging.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2252    RATING: 9.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Disclaimer: They're all Whedon's.

Author's Note: I wrote this in a bit of a fever, can't judge how it'll go over. But, really, how hard would it be for a heist to go wrong on some backwater moon? And how many people believe Mal's never done anything to warrant a death sentence?

Who Shall Stand

by Ariane

The gallows wear the fragrance of sweet cut pine,

a christening of sawdust -- expectation.

Nooses are elegant in silhouette.

Only the villain of the piece,

straight-backed and proud on the trapdoor,

commands as many pleasant shivers.

It's a clean collection of geometry, judges

the modest audience (the little ones ugly

with fascination).

Don't it sometimes take his head off?

The thief holds his soldier's stance

and trembles like a kitten when they blindfold him.

A voice tumbles out from above a shepherd's collar--

ever-merciful, he wants to know:

You got anything you need to say?

(A word could turn them all to stone,

faces rough-hewn to mirror his nauseous fear.

Dead men have that power.)

He expires in pink blooms of burst vessels,

frosted blue lips. There's a waterfall roar

in his ears--his leaden, freefalling heart

and sated justice purring on the ground.

What was it he said? (They wander off,

their own masters once more.) Anybody hear?

I owe you nothin', the preacher echoes, and echoes.

Not even an explanation.

Comments
Monday, 23 April 2007 10:07
Those last two lines sound like you. Why don't you owe us an explanation? I thought this was beautifully written but don't agree with you that this is the end Mal deserves. He is still my Big Damn Hero. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Monday, 23 April 2007 15:28
I thought this was simply amazing-- a brilliant combination of visual imagery and emotion. It made my stomach do a little trembly thing. Personally, I thought the ending was singularly appropriate. Mal won't apologize for himself, even as he dies. And while Mal may not deserve that kind of end (because we know him well enough to know that he's a good man), in his line of work I could see it being just to execute him without necessarily being right to execute him.
Monday, 23 April 2007 18:15
Oh that was awful! The imagery, I mean. It was so painful to read, it kept building and building... *shudder* For some reason, it reminded me of An Occurance at Owl Creek Bridge. I mean... well. Yeah, what Uncomprehending said. But I liked it! It was just heartbreaking. Poor Mal.
Monday, 23 April 2007 22:17
This definitely struck me as hauntingly plausible if Mal was caught on a a job and the crew hadn't been able to get back to rescue him in time:(

Still...the final lines do make me wonder if this is some sort of dream or fantasy of Mal's as he lies injured or dying as a sort of final judgement moment, with Book reiterating his comment to Mal from the BDM about not needing to tell Mal about his past as Mal is found wanting and "executed"...

BEB
Tuesday, 24 April 2007 19:30
That was pretty I liked the descriptivenessss

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