A Thing Called Love
Friday, April 6, 2007
This is AU to everything else I've been writing. Rayne; heavy angst and longing; R rating for sex and naughty stuff. One-shot.
Can't usually 'see' that Rayne would work myself, for all sorts of creepyfying and semi-incestuous reasons. However, this tale kept going around and around in my head, so here it is.
CATEGORY: FICTION TIMES READ: 4096 RATING: 8.0 (NC17) SERIES: FIREFLY
A THING CALLED LOVE
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Six foot six he stood on the ground, weighed two hundred and thirty five pounds
But I saw that giant of a man brought down to his knees by love
He was the kind of man that would gamble on luck
Look you in the eye and never back up
But I saw him cryin' like a little whipped pup because of love
Can't see it with your eyes hold it in your hand but like the wind that covers our land
Strong enough to rule the heart of any man this thing called love
It can lift you up it can let you down take your world turn it all around
Ever since time nothing's ever been found stronger than love
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Thing called Love – Johnny Cash and others
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It was seeing River surrounded by a pile of sliced and diced Reavers that had started it. Jayne had seen the corona of light around River's head, the green dress swirling around her pocket frame and the Reaver blood sliding so sweetly down the blade of that axe and he'd suddenly aquired a whole new lust object. Hadn't said anything to the Moonbrain girl, of course. Just spent some quality time in his bunk imagining getting all that coiled power, agility and precision under him and wrapped around him, begging for more. And, Lord, he'd make her beg.
It was the strangest and very violent flirting they'd had; right from the moment he'd clapped eyes on the little slip of a thing naked in her box. His mind kept replaying that moment and reminding him she wasn't a little girl, not even then. Okay, she barely came up to his chest and probably weighed 90 pounds soaking wet, but she had curves. Pert, tempting behind, long, long dancer's legs and a sweet swell of modest breasts with long, prominent nipples just begging to be sucked. Of course, trying to sell her to the Alliance hadn't helped, but she'd knifed him before that. Follow the knifing by being clocked with a tin of peaches and then darned near having his nuts ripped off in that bar. He should have been skittish around her after that - was most of the time - but her hand had drifted nor
That said, this was all kinds of hot. I love Rayne, although I admit, he is old enough to be her father ... but still - River is mature far beyond her years. I agree that you did a great job outlining his motivations and I loved River's timing. Although wouldn't she have been able to tell what would happen? Why do it in the cargo bay? But still, it was a great story and beautifully written.
Definitely loved the whole fluffy/porn-y setup for River and Jayne, cuz the points made would be stuff that Jayne would think on if he ever decided River was the one to snare him;)
My only criticisms are as follows:
1) Zoe would never hold a gun to River's head unless River was in a trance again and she wasn't responding to verbal cues, so Zoe here seems a tad too gung-ho;
2) River came off as kinda like a horny teen version of a Bene Gesserit from "Dune" in that she can do all that for Jayne having never been intimate with anyone else (I would presume theoreticals are different than hands-on;D) and she can predict/ensure she gets preggers with twins on the first go around with Jayne? I am all for River the Superwoman...but even I draw a line;)
Still...entertaining stuff that needs a gorram sequel!
BEB
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