Blue Sun Room FICTION - ADVENTURE

who are you, who am I, what are we now Prologue

Tuesday, March 27, 2007

Everyman must look in ward at the big questions of who they realy are for mal his time is about to begin

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2938    RATING: 5.0 (PG13)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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This is the refurbished verson thanks to BlueEyedBrigadier. I hope for more help in the future from everyone.

My name is Malcolm Reynolds. I perform a "vital” task out here on the black…I am a smuggler; if you need it and no one else can get it, I can. To others, I'm Captain Reynolds, the man that captains the Firefly-class cargo ship Serenity. To many, my friends once knew me as Sergeant Reynolds of The Balls and Bayonets Brigade. Really, I’m just ‘Mal’…but I can’t help thinking on the odd occasion ‘WHO IN THE HELL AM I?!”

"Captain...Captain...CAPTAIN!”

Mal awakened to the familiar title being yelled over the intercom, and after a few grumbles and a quick search for his suspenders still connected to his pants, he was ready for action. In a flash, Mal was on the bridge of Serenity with River, who was sitting in the pilot’s chair with her knees at her chest and hands at the controls.

"Little Albatross, what’s with the awful big noise?"

"Reavers."

After hearing one of the most dreaded words in the English or Chinese dictionary, Mal went right into battle mode, looking over the radar and threw the window…no Reavers anywhere.

Feeling a bit shaken and an emotion he could only describe as hope – since he had forgotten what hope was a long time ago – Mal spoke again.

"Uh…River? Are you sure it’s Reavers and not scary monsters?" Mal made claws with his hand as he said the words ‘scary monsters.’ River didn't say anything, just looked up at Mal with wide eyes so black with fear.

"Right…of course. So how long do we have before...”

"One hour, 15 minutes and 44 seconds 43 seconds 42, 41, 40 until they see us. If nothing is done, then in...”

“Don’t say it! I know…you stay here to try and lose them. I'll round up the crew and get a strategy going.”

"Yes, captain."

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8 minutes later, the crew began to arrive in the cargo bay. First to meet up with Mal was Zoë, before being followed quickly by Kaylee and Simon – Mal

Comments
Wednesday, 28 March 2007 01:32
Please get a beta, there are so many spelling and grammatical errors in this piece it ruins the reading of it and one or two sentences make no sense at all. You will find the effort will be worth it. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Wednesday, 28 March 2007 04:19
I second the beta request, it seems like a good start, but the editing errors are VERY distracting.
Wednesday, 28 March 2007 22:55
Have to agree with my fellow commentators here, Albio. There's some good ideas here, but they are buried under some seriously harsh spelling, grammar and formatting. A beta tester is your friend.

BEB
Thursday, 29 March 2007 01:26
Albio, I got your post, I assume you wanted it beta'd. Where would you like me to send it in it's edited form. I like your ideas. email me with your addy so I can send you the edited version.
Thursday, 29 March 2007 14:07
Albio, I think you meant to send your edited version to ShinyOtter not me. I am not a beta but ShinyOtter is offering, suggest you do that. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 31 March 2007 03:25
Wow, nicely edited, it reads a lot better now. Any time you want something beta'd I'd be happy to help. You have a great idea here.

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