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The Right To Love - Chapter 4

Friday, March 23, 2007

Prompts 21-30 in my Simon-centric 100 prompt story. Mal and Inara fight, again, while an old foe comes back and wreaks havoc on our BDHs. Rated R for angst and implied unpleasantness. Simon/Kaylee, Mal/Inara

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A/N: All right everyone - now it's getting serious ... within the following post, the angst will commence and pretty much not let up for the rest of the piece. (I really hope you enjoyed those first few chapters of fluff!)

Thanks again to Leiasky for the beta.

This is a long one so it might just have to hold you over the weekend ... of course, I could be persuaded (read: bribed) if I got a whole bunch of nice, shiny comments ... In case you missed the subtle reference - COMMENT!

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15760>Chapter 1

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15783>Chapter 2

http://www.fireflyfans.net/bluesun.aspx?bid=15892>Chapter 3

Link to http://www.geocities.com/maegovannen/Firefly/Joss100Challenge.html>prompt table

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The Right To Love - Chapter 4 (Prompts 21-30)

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021. Lonely

Kaylee was always smiling. It wasn’t a secret to anyone on board that it was her preferred expression. But, since she and Simon had been together, her normally radiant smile had turned to blinding. And she was fairly certain that no one, not even Jayne, was immune to its uplifting powers.

But apparently, today, at this moment, Simon was. Kaylee regarded him unnoticed from the entryway to the infirmary, her head cocked to one side. He was working in his normal, efficient manner, hands sure and steady as they parsed out medication and made quick notes in each of the crew’s charts. That wasn’t what concerned Kaylee.

What concerned her were the darkening circles under his eyes – the ones he tried to pretend weren’t there. What concerned her more was Simon’s increasing agitation as it became obvious he wasn’t sleeping well. And Kaylee knew he had to be tired. Grinning wickedly at the thought of what exactly they did to get so tuckered out, she allowed herself a moment of wistful daydreaming, before turning her attention back to her swai boyfriend. Something was bothering him and Kaylee was going to f

Comments
Friday, 23 March 2007 11:04
DAMN IT I WROTE A BIG COMMENT AND IT GOT LOST!

But, suffice to say, I am SHAKING. That was so good. I'll comment properly later on, got a seminar to go to.

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Friday, 23 March 2007 11:10
brillant please continue
Friday, 23 March 2007 11:42
Oh Wow, I am sitting here with my heart in my mouth worried for Kaylee and Mal and hoping against hope that Zoe was wearing her gorram vest and will come to and plan the big gorram rescue. This was very tense and any time Niska appears my heartrate rattles out of control. Good writing, more! Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 23 March 2007 13:41
*Answering Machine Voice*
Blackbeanie is unable to comment right now due to extreme shock. She does however send praise for causing this shock. Awesome.
Friday, 23 March 2007 22:01
Holy...fucking...hell...I'm fighting the urge to curl into the foetal position and whimper endlessly right now, TamSibling!

Gotta say...you are the epitome of understatement. Previous chapter, you say angst is coming...but this ain't angst! "Angst" is confusion and irritation and sadness. This? This was heart-wrenching pain interspersed with moment of joy that only serve to make the pain worse when it happens!

BEB
Saturday, 24 March 2007 01:34
Wow guys! *blushes*

Had no idea this little chappy would render you all into such a state of shock ...

*winks*

Okay, maybe I did!

Once chapter 5 is beta'd, I'll post - I promise ... although the angst doesn't get any better ... sad to say!
Tuesday, 27 March 2007 04:12
Ahh, I love reading everyone's comments. . . heee, I know where it all goes and how it ends. . . but I still love reading it over and over again. Even the angsty parts because, you know, that's just love. . . :)

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