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Tranquillity - Part VII

Wednesday, March 7, 2007

Jobless and soon to be on the drift, accepting Inara's charity turns out to be the least of Mal's problems...

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 1462    RATING: 9.0 (NC17)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“I just– It's all so standard... and boring,” Zoe grumbles as she follows her husband down yet another corridor, indistinguishable from the last ten.

“Two-thousand and eight, two-thousand and nine,” Wash mutters under his breath as they pass the numbered doors. “How can it be more boring than our bunk?” he returns, “Wait and see, you don't know what it's going to be like yet.”

“Honey, it's a hub. They're all the same. They give me the creeps,” she says flatly.

He stops short outside a door, folds his arms and sighs. Too late she remembers he grew up on a hub most likely the twin of this one, just wreathed in a fog of pollution. “This will be different,” he says firmly, “But if you're determined to hate it, let's turn around now.”

She deflates a little, suddenly feeling far less justified in her complaining, like a petulant child caught out. “I'll give it a try,” she says, a bite of impatience still in her voice.

Wash doesn't care, he knows victory when he sees it. He slots his identi-chip into the lock and it goes from red to green. “You first,” he says.

She pushes open the door and steps inside. “You silly little man,” she says softly, “How much did this cost?”

There's a double bed with satin sheets. Thick, soft carpet on the floor and tasteful hangings over cream walls. The windows look out over New Dunsmuir, the docks just visible in the distance and the houses of none-corporate workers laid out far down below. The sun is setting, the horizon a smear of pinky-orange fading to blue. It's not a bad view, as far as they go on Beaumonde.

“Enough,” he replies, and then can't quite suppress his glee, “Wait until you see the bathroom.”

She drops her bag on the bed and pushes open the other door. There's a jacuzzi-sized tub, more than big enough for them both. “A real bath!” she enthuses, turning around and flinging her arms around his neck.

He lets her kiss him for a moment. “Why don't you run that bath? I bet it takes a while to fill,” he says quietly when their lips break apart for a mo

Comments
Wednesday, 07 March 2007 17:55
Good ol' Wash! Such a great husband. Zoe's a lucky woman. And Jayne and Kirsty... is this a romance in the making? =D
Wednesday, 07 March 2007 18:50
Oh, I'm really enjoying this series! You have a more than just solid grasp on all the characters and their voices. Especially your Zoe and Wash are just spectacular! Loving and steady, nothing overtly sugary about just. They feel as married and fascinating as on the show.

Your little side note on Mal and dirt, the cows and the life he left, in one of the earlier parts.. I was delighted. Exactly the right rhythm and word choices to make it feel as nostalgic and regretful but ultimately.. over, as it is.

Then here, that small moment with Jayne. Nothing flashy, just an encounter, but it says a lot about him, the few soft bits and his subtle respect for women, his sensitivity to the grey areas of buying sex. Three-dimensional Jayne is a rare gift in fanfic, thank you!

Not to mention: Plot!!

If there is one thing to complain about, it's the shortness of the parts. You could have easily fit all of these posted chapters into a single one, especially since you posted them all at the same time, anyway. *g*

To sum up: I'm very excited about this series, where is there more? Please?
Wednesday, 07 March 2007 23:24
Aww, Wash is so perfect... Zoe is ridiculously lucky to have him.

Ooh, is Jayne having emotional attachments to a woman? This could be interesting...
Is Tranquility the planet, or some not-so-lovely quirk of this job?
Thursday, 08 March 2007 01:24
I admit, I'm not easy to please, especially with regard to Firefly fanfics. It takes a truly engaging story, with near-perfect characterization and dialogue to keep me interested beyond chapter one. I'm not really a fan of the "love fics." By this I mean the strictly romantic variety. Yours has just enough to establish the relationships without dwelling too long, or getting overly (or perversely) descriptive.

I look forward to the continuation of this story. I'm intrigued by the prospects you've introduced.

Keep up the good work.


Rob O.

P.S. By the way, nine crew members? I'm doing a quick head count. Mal, Kaylee, Jayne, Zoe, Wash, Book, River, and Simon. Mal mentioned head had nine people to feed. Inara's gone, correct? Just checking...
Thursday, 08 March 2007 03:41
Really enjoyed your fic - your grasp of sci fi concepts is refreshing and vividly written. Your characterizations are wonderful! Looking forward to more.
Thursday, 08 March 2007 06:23
Good ol' Wash...man knows how to treat his lambytoes to somethin' special when the opportunity arises;D

Definitely can't wait to see more of this...though it seemed like Jayne and Kirsty were using code in their goodbyes. Was waiting for Jayne to ponder on some hidden signal for a moment;)

BEB
Thursday, 08 March 2007 12:06
Knew there was a jolly good reason I love Wash so much and here it is! He knows Zoe so well and he loves her so much, it was very touching and made me warm and happy. And Jayne gettting some trim, he didn't even have to pay for! At least, I hope he won't have to pay for it. I'm not sure that when she says Tranquility she is talking about the moon our BDHs are heading for but we'll see. I still feel nervous though with so many of the crew off the ship. Kind of makes me think of Serenity as vulnerable. Can't wait for the next part and very well done on completely blissing me out on a great story with some beautiful character moments. *Xie xie ni*, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Friday, 30 March 2007 02:12
This series just keeps getting better and better. You have done such a wonderful job with the character voices while adding much needed new characters to the verse.

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