Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Aftermath

Saturday, February 24, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Back to the angst. Freya is recovering slowly, but her mental state is causing concern. Please leave feedback etc. It really helps when I'm writing something I'm not sure about.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3408    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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Prologue

She was so excited. For once in her short life she was going somewhere different, somewhere away from home, on her own, and she was so looking forward to it. So young and yet prepared for anything the ‘verse could throw at her.

“Are you ready yet, dear?” Her mother looked around the door into the bedroom.

“Nearly,” she said, stuffing her nightdress into the case. “Just packing the last of my bits.” She picked up a small teddy bear.

“You can’t take that, sweetheart!”

She grasped the bear to her chest. “Oh, momma, I have to! He’s my bear – I can’t leave him behind! What if I get homesick?”

Her mother came to stand next to the bed, idly picking up a small blouse and folding it carefully. “This is a special place you’re going to. You won’t have time to get homesick – there’ll be so much to do.”

“I know. But I want my things with me. I can take him, can’t I?” She had a hold so tight on her toy that no-one was going to pry it from her fingers.

“Oh, my dear.” Her mother took her into her arms, hugging her close and stroking her long brown hair. “You’re never going to grow up, are you?”

“I will, momma. Just not today.” She smiled.

“No, probably not.” The older woman sighed. “All right, pack him away. Just don’t let anyone else see him.”

“I bet lots of students have their toys with them.” The girl resumed packing – at least, resumed pushing things into her bag until it could hold no more. “I can’t wait.” She was happy and excited. “Is dad going to be home in time?” she asked, closing the case and locking it.

“He’s trying to make it, sweetheart. Don’t be too sad if he can’t,” her mother warned.

“I know he’s busy.” She sat down on the edge of her bed, the edge taken off her happiness. “I just thought … today … I don’t know when I’ll be back.”

“They’ll give you holidays. Of course they will,” her mother assured her. “And you can write. I know your brother would be pleased if you did.”

“He won’t care,” she scoffed, knowing he was too

Comments
Saturday, 24 February 2007 08:35
Oh yes, the emotional toll of Freya's torture is going to eat away at all of us, I have a feeling.

I am truly intrigued to see where you take this, Jane! I cannot wait.
Saturday, 24 February 2007 15:50
Oh...this was just freakin' brilliant stuff, Jane0904! The amount and quality of angst pouring off everyone shown here (and probably off those not shown) was just fabulous in how Mal's so "I ain't listening! I can't hear...she is?" and Simon's all "Listen very carefully, Mal...you need to start thinking like a sergeant right now."

BEB
Saturday, 24 February 2007 17:12
Very good.
Saturday, 24 February 2007 19:02
Poor Freya, she has a tough road ahead but so many people rooting for her that it has to make a difference. And Mal has such a strong indomitable will he won't give up on her or let anyone else either. I love how the whole crew is wanting her to pull through and my heart goes out to Mal when he hears Simon lay it on the line. Gulp. Ali D
You can't take the sky from me

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