On The Edge: Chapter 7
Friday, February 23, 2007
Kaylee begrudgingly agrees to Simon's demand and Inara has a typical fight with Mal as enemies close in on Serenity. Cannon pairings.
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Thanks to Tamsibling and Mal4Prez for the beta.
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Chapter 7
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Mal stuttered for a moment. “You keep in touch with –“
“Occasionally, Sir.”
“How come I didn’t know about this?”
River calmly kept her attention focused on the control panel in front of her, setting and tweaking the course until she was satisfied they would reach their destination as quickly as possible. The two engaged in a conversation behind her didn’t notice the small smile that crept onto her face as she eavesdropped.
“The amount of my business you don’t know about would astound you, sir.”
Mal huffed in annoyance. He liked to know everything that was going on on his boat, even the uncomfortable things. Made for fewer surprises. “An’ you think he’ll be able to help you locate the right people to take these plans off our hands?”
“He might.”
“Well get on the Cortex and make contact with –“
“Already done, sir.”
Mal stared dumfounded at her for a minute, knowing from past experience ranting and raving would get him nowhere with the battle hardened woman. “Were ya plannin’ on consultin’ me before you changed course?”
Zoe rolled her eyes at him. “River would have told you anyway.”
Mal sighed heavily. “Least one person on this boat respects my authority.”
Zoe put a comforting hand on his shoulder. “We all respect your authority.” She paused for effect and then continued, “Most of the time.”
Mal sighed and directed his attention to River as the chair she was sitting in swiveled slowly to face him. He knew she was simply waiting for him to speak. The girl was respectful of her captain, even if she knew what he was going to say.
“Anything I need to know?”
“Course is set, we’re a week out.”
“Can’t push the engines?”
“Kaylee still needs to make some adjustments. We’ve been pushing the boat pretty hard lately.”
Mal turned and flipped on the shipwide comm. “Kaylee, w
Still...I am really on the edge of my seat when it comes to this storyline, Leiasky! Can't wait for the last 6 parts;D
BEB
I think the tension is building wonderfully. I also love the Mal/Inara interaction and I really hope that they can find a way back to each other once this is all over.
he's gonna get a chance to fix things between them.
If I didn't know Mal's underlying intention, I would hate him so much.
But luckily I do, so what he's doing makes me 'aww'.
You ca't take the sky from me
heartbreking^ oh dear.
I just woke up, okay?!
Oh, and I forgot - UPDATE SOON :D:D
love the tension and momentum you're building
waiting on the next chapter, by the way, thanks for writing canon...it's comforting, kinda like Mal's old brown coat...there's still so much that can be done with it, you're proving that here.
I'm intrigued by who this "him" was that Mal referred to in his conversation with Zoe! Can't think off the top of my head who it is - can't wait to find out! Ooh, and I liked the line:
“You don’t look fine to me,” she said with a blunt perceptiveness only a child – and Jayne – seemed to possess. - It's so true! Hehehe.
On that note, more Jayne please! I feel like he - and actually River aswell - have been a bit neglected. But maybe that's just me. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and finding out if Maris can find the ship. I hope not!
Glad everyone is still liking the story. I'm sure that will change once I've posted the last chapter . . .
My goal with this story was to ultimately write for every character, as well as some new ones, and not just my favorites. It's really challenging though I've enjoyed the exercise.
And, I don't know if this is just me being really tired (I read this last night around midnight, and now it's past midnight now), but all these characterizations seem weaker than you can write them (sort of a back-handed compliment).
I'd rate it a 7 now, but I'll come back later to see if that stance needs revision.
Hehe.
Okay, Mal and Simon are starting to get on my nerves. Sexist much? I mean, it's not like Simon is a warrior himself. I get it, and they're behaving completely in character, but errr. And c'mon, Inara, wake up. You know what the man's like. Okay, rant over. I just hope the ladies are safe, and that the Alliance doesn't target them when Mal sends them off!
what happened to the chapter????
*sniffle* It was eaten by a Reaver!!
~SCE
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