Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Digging Through Memories

Tuesday, February 20, 2007

Post series, pre-BDM. The crew remembers little things about the one person who keeps this ragtag gang together. A bit long, but not long enough to break into bits...in my opinion. Comments welcome, as always.

All characters belong to Joss, usual disclaimers apply.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2935    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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The explosion rocked the ground, sending Zoë and Wash flying. The fireball that erupted over their heads only committed them to their prone positions, kissing the dirt and holding precious little air tight in their lungs. When the air was only mildly tangy and the sound was still watery in their ears, Zoë was the first up and looking towards the general direction of where the building had been. Soundlessly dropping her jaw, she began making her wavering way to the rubble.

Mal had only just entered the ramshackle building moments before the explosion.

Wash was still on the ground, shaking his head in disbelief. He wasn't sure his heart was still beating, despite the pounding he felt in his chest. The frame was still burning and there was his wife, now running towards it, calling for Mal to answer. He was up, stumbling, running, suddenly unable to catch a breath. The smoke was pouring out of the building. It looked like more smoke than fire...was that possible?

Why was Mal not answering Zoë? Wash realized he was now calling Mal's name between coughing and curses.

The townspeople were running with water. Zoë was pushing at debris. She moved fluidly now, systematically, pushing aside boards that were keeping her from going into a burning building that was still collapsing on itself.

Wash grabbed his wife around the waist and pulled back at her, just as flames leapt out to engulf her.

"What do you think you're doing?!" Wash shouted.

"The Captain is in there!" Zoë insisted. Wash looked back at the flames and smoke and burning wood.

"Then..." he gulped for fresh air, the cacophany of townspeople throwing buckets of water and shouting for more overpowering his shaken mind. "Then, we have to get him out."

***

Inara had been delighted to find a client here. She had been trying to prepare herself to leave Serenity, but lately Mal had been finding planets on which they could both work more and more, even on the Rim. This particular gentleman had been cultivating a vineyard, as they had done on E

Comments
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 04:21
Loved this-- you're dead on with the characters' voices, and the way you filled out the flashbacks with missing scenes was great.
The story was tense enough to make me sweat, but the ending made me smile. "What took you so long?"...tee hee!
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 09:12
Excellent! I loved the infill bits, particularly after Mal is saved on Niska's skyplex, because it always did seem somewhat pat that, injured as he was, he's walking around so soon after.
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 11:08
Absolutely brilliant! I was holding my breath and praying that they would find Mal alive. If anyone could survive an exploding building it is the Captain and thank goodness he did. I loved all the little sparks of memory from different members of the crew and found it very moving in many places. Kudos to you and thanks, Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 12:16
Really loved this fic! Wonderful writing and a rare glimpse at a few old memories. Very original!
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 20:42
Ok, I just want to know if there's gonna be more. You have a wonderful gift, Kacidilla, and I wanna read a lot more from you. Keep it coming!

jW
WHELP
Tuesday, 20 February 2007 20:55
Mmmm... Suspenseful
Wednesday, 21 February 2007 07:36
There's more to this, right? We still need to get remaining BDHs' memories of Mal to ensure equality...right?

;)

Still...amazing work here, kacidilla! Definitely could imagine this as a "missing" episode before "Those Left Behind" and after "Objects in Space" ;D

BEB
Wednesday, 21 February 2007 14:02
i hadn't thought to write out more with this particular story...i wrote it all at once and posted and then had my usual freak out of "OMG WHAT DID I JUST DO?! I DIDN'T EVEN PROOFREAD!" and then you all surprised me by actually liking it...

i'll think about doing a follow-up...just for you folks. :)

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