Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Coming of Age

Sunday, February 11, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Things can turn on a dime ... it's a long piece, but please let me know if you like/hate/rate. We're getting towards the darker stuff now.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 3536    RATING: 9.0 (G)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“Hank, got some research for you.”

“Really?” The pilot turned in his chair and looked at the captain, carrying Ethan in the sling across his chest, and managing not to look stupid doing it. “Something you don’t want Freya to know about?”

“No.” Mal tried to cross his arms but failed. He contented himself with hitching his thumbs in his pants pockets.

“Pity. Could do with being able to blackmail you once in a while.”

Mal found himself sidetracked for a moment. “To do what?” he asked.

“Oh. I don’t know. Maybe a few days break? Somewhere nice?”

“A naked beach?” Mal murmured.

“What?” Hank didn’t understand.

“Never mind.” Mal shook his head. “Look, you do what I’ve asked and I’ll take the days off thing under advisement.”

“Fine. Only you haven’t asked anything yet.” Hank grinned and nodded towards Ethan. “Is this what having a baby does to you? Makes your brain turn to mush?”

“So Freya tells me.” Mal glared down at his pilot. “I want you to check out where there might be a fair, a carnival, maybe a dance … something we can all attend.”

Hank’s eyebrows raised. “Why? And when?”

“17th of this month.”

“That’s a week away.”

“You can count.”

“Been doing that for a while now. And why would I be finding said fair or dance?”

“Because I'm captain and you work for me.”

“Well, yes,” Hank backpedalled. “But I meant more specifically.”

“Just find out, dong mah ?” Mal turned to leave the bridge.

“This anything to do with River’s birthday?” Hank’s voice followed him.

“You wanna keep that to yourself,” Mal said, suddenly right at his ear.

“But that’s it?”

“Maybe.”

Hank grinned. “She’ll love it.”

“Just don’t let her find out.”

“You figure she don’t know already?”

Mal stood up. “River’s been very careful not to read anyone lately. Ain't you noticed?”

“Is that Freya’s influence?”

“Some. But I think it’s Jethro’s too.”

“Brave man.”

Mal smiled slightly. “Just don’t you tell anyone else.”

“Not even Zoe?” Hank asked,

Comments
Sunday, 11 February 2007 15:49
NOT FAIR! Bring back our box-dropping, man-ape gone wrong thing! Shiny writing as always, but leaving off where you did is just plumb mean!

Write more soon.

Please.
Sunday, 11 February 2007 19:46
Oh bugger...there goes another of my shiny story ideas right down the commode! 'Least it was stolen by someone with more than small bit of skill with cursor and keyboard;D

Still...this was a brilliant chapter, Jane0904! Between the couples' moments, and Jayne's slow burn and detonation, this was a mighty entertaining chapter. Really gotta wonder, though, how things are gonna go once Jethro has the big picture of River having all these unwanted skills and abilities, along with having a rather big set of affections for the trained-ape-without-the-training mercenary we all love:(

BEB
Sunday, 11 February 2007 23:30
Oh excellent ... I cannot wait to see where the rest of this goes ... maybe River can sneak off the boat in the middle of the night and find Jayne and they can - um, "make up?" Yes, I know, I have a dirty mind, but I love Rayne.

I love Jethro too though which is definitely causing some conflict. Simon and Kaylee at the top of the ferris wheel was absolutely perfect and I do hope Kaylee can get pregnant again ... I am a mite worried it's taking so long ... now, about this angst you speak of ...
Sunday, 11 February 2007 23:51
Poor Jayne, like Mal warned River she has been playing with fire only now she realises it. I loved all the moments you gave the crew, Mal with Freya and the baby (loved Bethany calling the 'rabbit' Jayne and Simon's reaction), Simon bribing the barker to stop the ride when they were at the top so he could share a romantic moment with his wife, Hank and Zoe etc. So much good stuff, just hope now that River has come to her senses she can find a way to get Jayne back. Telling him the truth might help. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Tuesday, 13 February 2007 16:40
Neat story, and good execution. I have to say that I really loved the barkeep. He had a lot of personality for a guy with a bit part, and that lent extra credibility to the rest of the scene.

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