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Bad Day pt2

Thursday, July 15, 2004

Zoe gives Mal some friendly advice.

CATEGORY: FICTION    TIMES READ: 2608    RATING: 10.0 (PG)    SERIES: FIREFLY

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“So,” Zoe drawled as she slid into the seat Mal had vacated. She watched him calmly and began to eat. Wash sighed and sank into a seat across from her. She flicked her eyes at Mal’s bare chest and back up again. He hastily began buttoning his shirt.

“Yeah?” he said defensivly.

A slim brow arched delicately in mild amusment. “That’s what I’d like to know. What was that all about?” She looked in the direction River had gone with curiosity. Jayne snorted and opened his mouth to reply, but two equally murderous looks set him back a step. “Captn’s gettin’apieceof..,” he said in a unintelligible grumble.

“Jayne,” Wash said cheerfully. “Help me go move the cargo.” Wash stood and motioned for the lugheaded idiot to follow. He gave Zoe the “you’ll tell me everything later” look and headed for the door.

“But I wanna see Zoe tear the Capt…” Jayne protested. Mal shot the other man a dark look, his jaw tightening with irritation. More then likely because Mal knew that Zoe wouldn't let his disapperance rest.

“Jayne go help Wash with the cargo,” Mal said sternly.

Jayne rose grumbling from his seat, “Never get ta see the Capt’ get his hinny hole toasted,” he huffed and reluctantly followed Wash from the galley.

“You gonna toast my hinny hole?” Mal asked warily with a hint of his usual rougish smile.

Zoe shook her head. “Nope. So what was that all about,” Zoe repeated again.

Mal shrugged his shoulders, shifted restlessly, and then settled on crossing his arms. “What was what,” he returned with a deadpanned expression.

"Hm." Zoe continued to eat, letting an uncomfortable silence start to stretch. Mal tucked his shirt in with much grunting and swearing and turned to leave.

“Where’d you go?” Zoe said.

Mal stopped and turned back. “Out.”

“Out where,” she asked.

Comments
Thursday, 15 July 2004 20:26
I am really liking this story but Zoe doesn't sound like Zoe in her scenes with Mal. I cannot see her ripping into the Captain like that and not seeing deeper into him than it seems here. And Zoe laying the law down on Mal as if Serenity it *her* ship and she can boss him around just doesn't sit right. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Thursday, 15 July 2004 20:58
I would have to agree. I did some minor edits. But my Zoe voice isn't really strong.. :( sorry.
Friday, 16 July 2004 13:04
You've got a very compelling mystery here. Great story!
Friday, 16 July 2004 23:44
OK I'm hooked. When I got to the part about Kaylee and her being missing I thought wtf you're writing a story about Kaylee being presumed dead... This better have a happy ending..
Great story honestly 10½*
Saturday, 17 July 2004 11:13
When thins story is concluded, you must send it to Joss. I wouldnt be surprised if he uses it for a sesons finale/opener then. Shit, i wouldnt be surprised if he asked you to write for the show. This is truly spectacular work. And your skill at telling a compelling and captivating story is just amazing. Screw 10, I give this bloody 100
Friday, 19 September 2008 21:32
Seriously. This is really good! I'm completely hooked. I had no problems seeing this story in my head. It feels like I'm actually watching the show.

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