Blue Sun Room FICTION - GENERAL

Possibilities - Part III

Saturday, January 20, 2007

Maya. Post-BDM. Will Simon consider staying on Corvus? And Kaylee has a sisterly talk with River. Feedback, please, and let me know whether you love or hate this.

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“Where’ve you been?” Kaylee asked as River dropped from the horse’s back.

“Out for a ride.”

“I kinda figured that,” the mechanic smiled. “Just wondered where.”

“To the hills.” She pointed to a purple smudge along the edge of the world. “We found a stream and I paddled.” She lifted one bare foot, covered in dirt.

“You’d better wash up before Simon sees you,” Kaylee suggested. “You know what he thinks about you not wearing shoes.”

“Too tight,” River said, leading her horse towards the barn. “I can’t feel the world in them. It’s like trying to fix Serenity wearing mittens.”

Kaylee laughed and followed her. “I don’t think I've ever tried that, but I know what you mean. Sometimes I just wanna take off all my clothes and run naked.”

“You should,” the girl said. “Simon would like it. And it does wonders.”

“Don’t tell me you …” Kaylee goggled.

“There was no-one there,” River said calmly, picking up a brush to start cleaning her mount. “No-one to tell me to stop.”

“Good job there wasn't anyone to watch you either.”

River sighed. “No.”

“And what was that for, mei-mei ?” When River didn’t answer Kaylee went on, “That damn big noise you just made?”

“It wasn't big.”

“Big enough.” Kaylee put her head onto one side. “You missing Jayne?”

River just scratched at a patch of dried earth on the horse’s flank. “I don’t know what you mean.”

“I don’t know what your game is with him, but you gotta be careful.” Kaylee glanced out of the door to make sure her husband wasn't anywhere in sight. “Jayne’s older’n you, a lot, and bigger. Not sure you can handle all the feelings you’re turning on in that man.”

“He’s my friend.”

“Mine too, but …” Kaylee paused. “Simon’s worried. So’m I.”

“I know.” River turned to look at her, her great dark eyes like pools in the dim barn. “But Jayne doesn’t care for me that way.”

“And what about you? How do you feel about him?” Kaylee held her breath, not sure if she really wanted to know the answer.

River stopped, he

Comments
Saturday, 20 January 2007 14:11
11 hours and 23 minutes ,oh how I love River. Great story keep it up.
Saturday, 20 January 2007 14:59
Oh, wow. The suspense is really incrediable.
Saturday, 20 January 2007 15:39
Another wonderful piece of suspense as usual. Your characters sound like the real thing! Can't wait for more!
Saturday, 20 January 2007 15:49
GAH!!!! I got the shivers here! Hope that most folks get safe, but, if not... *grins* River can pull another Psycho like what she did on Mr. Universes Moon. Maybe.

-Danny
Saturday, 20 January 2007 15:56
I really liked Kaylee standing up to what was Simon's attempt at persuading her to leave Serenity settle. I could so see that conversation playing out on the screen. And then the Reavers turn up! I guess that proves that even an idyll like this isn't guarantee to be safe, at least on Serenity they can run away, stay on the move and have their 'family' around them. Ali D :~)
You can't take the sky from me
Saturday, 20 January 2007 18:33
Oh...I really gotta wonder if someone was thinking "This can't get any worse" just before the Reavers arrived :(

Still...mighty brilliant stuff here, Jane0904! Completely adored the Kaylee-River conversation...and the Silee argument was good too.

Now...please understand that my reduced enthusiasm at the Silee argument about potentially settling down doesn't mean I thought it was crap. It was quite the piece of dialogue...but personally, I thought Kaylee went up a bit too quickly and harshly. Yeah, Simon wasn't handling the concept of introducing the idea to Kaylee all that well and Kaylee's feelings about Serenity are definitely in-character; however, while I reading the argument (both parts), I just couldn't help but feel that Kaylee was being a lot more close-minded than usual. Like I said, her core feelings and argument are on the mark, but how they're presented? Bit too knee-jerk hysterical:(

BEB
Monday, 22 January 2007 05:26
Beautiful build to some great tension ... I really wish Kaylee hadn't overreacted about Simon wanting to stay. He really hadn't made a decision, but she was ready to place blame.

It is a hot button issue for them, but still ... And oh god, Reavers ... YIKES!

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